Talk:2017 Africa Cup of Nations final/GA1
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 10:17, 7 July 2021 (UTC)
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- Not sure why those three refs are in the lead, either ref the lot or none of it (my pref) and put those refs in the main body.
- Removed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- Could add in the lead a brief summary of how each side got to the final.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- "represented CAF at" explain before using.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- "the civil war in that country" is there a link for it?
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- "2 (1986,..." that 1986 is overlinked.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- "the 1986 and 2008 tournaments" they're both overlinked.
- Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:59, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- "Egypt were 35th in..." Prior to the final?
- At the start of the tournament. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- There's an article for 2017 Africa Cup of Nations Group A.
- Added link. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- I'm not mad keen on (a) the coloured tables (b) the decorative icons (c) the lack of ACCESS consideration and (d) the auto-collapsed group tables.
- I've removed the flags from the results, and also axed the group tables. Not sure what ACCESS issues you think there are here? — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Perhaps make it clear that each team played one another just once in the group stage?
- I've added the tournament format to Background. — Amakuru (talk) 11:59, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- "close-range foal" leave your horse on the sideline please.
- Neigh. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Sébastien Siani has an accent.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Link penalty area.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- I think "follow up" in that context should be hyphenated.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "quarter finals" vs "quarter-final" hyphen or nay?
- I've gone with yes. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "saves to Mané" saves to? saves against? saves from?
- I've amended to "saves to shots from Mané..." does that work?
- Link extra time.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "couldn't" - avoid contractions.
- Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "Penalty shoot-out " link to the association football one.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Link "penalties" to penalty kick.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "give a 4–4 score" eh? -> making it 4–4?
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "Vincent Aboubakar scored again" had he scored already?
- No. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "the semi-final.[15] Their semi-final" repetitive.
- Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "Egypt's 2017 Africa Cup of Nations campaign" might have been better to link the tournament itself in the first "route to the final" section?
- You'd think so, wouldn't you. I think happened because I swapped the two teams around at some point.
- "competing in Group D " could link 2017 Africa Cup of Nations Group D.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Link header.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "two chances for" to score.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "missed good chances" good per whom?
- Reworded. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "they'd" avoid contractions.
- Reworded. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
Link cross.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- And free-kick.
- Done on first mention (and all dehyphenated). — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Romain Saïss has a diacritic.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Essam El Hadary - our article doesn't hyphenate El-Hadary.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "Mohamed Elneny opened the scoring" full stop.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "9pm" etc, non-breaking space before the pm.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- Link kit.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "attacking rhythm" bit newspaperish for me.
- Reworded. — Amakuru (talk) 11:10, 8 July 2021 (UTC)
- "in attack it was the Egyptians who were more comfortable at half time" grammar and [according to whom?]?
- Reworded. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- "lack of attacking potency" bit repetitive.
- Removed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- "before gathering" what?
- Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- Link "lob".
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- "held on two win" to
- Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- Where are all the officials referenced?
- I've removed them, apart from the ref himself. Most matches don't seem to list that info. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- In Aftermath, Héctor Cúper needs diacritics.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- It's Valencia CF not Valencia F.C.
- Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- It's The Guardian.
- Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- Is BBC Sport italicised (per ref/article) or not (per article)?
- Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- E.g. ref 34 has spaced hyphen, should be en-dash. Check others.
- Fixed. — Amakuru (talk) 11:50, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
That's my first pass, so it's on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 10:45, 7 July 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: I've finished looking at your points so far. Cheers — Amakuru (talk) 11:59, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- I'll take a look as soon as I can, I'm somewhat under the gun to get the UEFA Euro 1972 Final done, but working on it....! The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 12:02, 9 July 2021 (UTC)
- The "report" link just redirects to the CAF homepage.
- I've switched to using the BBC page. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- On that note, where are the formation indicated in the graphic noted/sourced?
- The BBC page covers that thankfully. I made a small tweak to the positions of Bassogog and Moukandjo in the SVG file so they match. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- For consistency, all online refs need access-dates, e.g. ref 35.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- You have BBC Sport in the prose and BBC Sport in the refs.
- This was a result of a CITE REPAIR job which took place a few days ago... I've switched the prose to italics to match.
- And then oddly, Twitter (which is a website) appears non-italics, yet CNN which is a publisher is in italics... (and not linked).
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- I think Goal.com has an article.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 7 vs Ref 41 both FIFA but formatted slightly differently.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 10 AP is linked but ref 13 PA is not?
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 24 seems to mention DW four times, once is probably sufficient.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 26 I think you might have been the person to ask why I had .com after 11v11...
- Quite possibly. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 35 link publisher for consistency.
- Done. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- Ref 39 pretty sure VOA has an article.
- If you say so. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- The ext link is the CAF homepage again, not the Africa Cup of Nations site.
- I've removed it. CAF evidently aren't interested in keeping home pages for bygone tournaments. — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 06:20, 10 July 2021 (UTC)
- Amakuru just checking you saw these additional remarks...? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:46, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: ah, I did not. Many thanks, will get on to those shortly. — Amakuru (talk) 13:48, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: I have looked at all of them so far. CHeers — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- All good here, I'm happy to promote to GA. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 08:11, 14 July 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: I have looked at all of them so far. CHeers — Amakuru (talk) 15:56, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- @The Rambling Man: ah, I did not. Many thanks, will get on to those shortly. — Amakuru (talk) 13:48, 13 July 2021 (UTC)
- Amakuru just checking you saw these additional remarks...? The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!!!!) 13:46, 13 July 2021 (UTC)