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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 02:45, 23 March 2018 (UTC)Reply

Lead and infobox
  • For this sentence ("We're Not Makin' Love Anymore" was released as the album's lead single on September 14, 1989 while "Someone That I Used to Love" was distributed as the second and final one in 1989), I would use “and” instead of “while” and add a comma after the first instance of “1989” to separate the two parts of the sentence.
  • I am not certain about this sentence (However, it was commercially successful as it topped that charts in both Norway and Sweden.), specifically the “it was commercially successful” as it is a little subjective. I think that it is better to have the parts on the charts and certification stand by itself.
Development and songs
  • Please use Streisand’s full name on the first use and link her.
  • The structure of the second and third paragraphs is somewhat strange. Would it be better to make the release of “We’re Not Makin’ Love Anymore” as a single into its own paragraph as you have done with "Someone That I Used to Love” as the second single. It was just a little weird to read the second paragraph as it goes from a general overview of the album to a part on the first single.
Critical reception
  • I do not see any major issues with this, but do think that a topic sentence would be helpful here?
Commercial performance
  • This section looks good to me.
Final comments
Just letting you know that I will get to this this weekend. Thank you as always. Carbrera (talk) 04:30, 27 March 2018 (UTC).Reply
Aoba47 – I believe I addressed the issues – thank you very much. Carbrera (talk) 23:00, 31 March 2018 (UTC).Reply
Verdict
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