Talk:Domnica

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Your references, despite the fact that you had a difficult time finding them, seem great and you put footnotes in appropriate places. Maybe try to split up the article into sections, like Early life, and then a section like "Galates" or something indicating the story behind the scandal of her son, just because that seems like the most significant part of her history. Also, some of the sentences seem long and confusing, partly because it's easy to mix up the names. Maybe try cutting some of the sentences into really simple sentences so it's really easy to read. Romanciv14 20:22, 13 May 2007 (UTC) Hannah

Being that you say you are not done, you seem to have a lot of good information here. I only had a few comments. In one of the sentences you used the phrase "In fact." I think that this is too conversational. Maybe just drop that part and keep the rest of the sentence? Also, later you say that she had several daughters and only mention two. Maybe say "She had daughters, blah and blah." or "She had several daughters and a son, blah." Just so the quantity of daughters isn't confusing. And lastly, before mentioning that Valentinianus' parents were devastated by his early death, I would mention that he died and about when he died or how. I was kind of confused as to how soon he died (birth, childhood accident, war). I was just curious. If you can't find out how/when, I'd just be like, "However, V had an untimely death." But yes, this is actually good! Good luck looking for the rest of the stuff that you were looking for.

(Sry... the last comment was made by Lauren-A.B.)

The article looks good so far and I only have one new comment to add. I noticed there is a lot of talk about the family life of Albia moreso than Albia herself; however, this obviously may be due to finding a lack of sources which is obviously understandable as I had this problem as well. If you are unable to find more information on Albia directly, I would suggest breaking up the article into different parts (as was mentioned above) so you can categorize the information a little better. The article looks good so far and good luck on finding additional resources (I know it can be tough!!!). ~James

Great job doing a very difficult task of research; you had one of the most challenging topics in the class and responded admirably. Good response to comments as well; be careful about keeping an encyclopedic style. Anisekstrong 03:40, 1 June 2007 (UTC)Anise K. Strong

Byzanz

In the section Defeat at Adrianople and the Death of Valens, the link to Byzanz in the second paragraph redirects to Istanbul. This is not really helpful to curious readers. Although still sparse, I'd recomment linking it directly to History of Istanbul. There is also insufficient information in the article for Theodosius I about where and how he became emperor, so until there is additional information added, we'll just have to do the best we can do. The Bearded One 11:11, 13 July 2007 (UTC)

Petronius

The text claims that she is the daughter of Petronius, which links to a man born in the first century AD. Yet she was born in the 4th. — Preceding unsigned comment added by 74.58.191.107 (talk) 06:29, 7 September 2011 (UTC)