Talk:American Airlines Flight 327/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: RecycledPixels (talk · contribs) 16:43, 9 November 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Pi.1415926535 (talk · contribs) 05:31, 29 November 2024 (UTC)

I'll take this review. Please respond to comments with {{done}}, {{not done}}, etc. Thanks, Pi.1415926535 (talk) 05:31, 29 November 2024 (UTC)

@RecycledPixels: I've completed my review. Most minor items, and some recommended rearranging. Pi.1415926535 (talk) 00:33, 1 December 2024 (UTC)

Infobox and lede

• I recall that TF Green is not actually in Providence - it's in nearby Warwick, Rhode Island. Several of the other airports also seem to be outside their respective municipalities. The article should reflect that. Other than TF Green, the others can probably just say "near" rather than "in".
• Given the number of intermediate stops, I would recommend just having the count of stops in the infobox and lede. The list of them can stay in the Background section.
• The Convair CV-240 family article doesn't mention a "CV-240-0" model, so "CV-240" is probably fine for the infobox.
• I recommend some sort of geographic view - at very least coordinates. Even better would be a map (perhaps using {{maplink}}) showing the various airports and the crash site.

Background

• Use semicolons to separate the various airport locations
• The airline had operated... Either remove "had", or change the final words to "since 1948."
• The Passengers and Crew sections should be moved to subsections here (except for the details about injuries suffered, which can go in Aftermath)

Accident

• Remove "it" from then it struck
• "the" is incorrectly capitalized in the second paragraph
• If you have the link to TF Green, then link Tulsa International Airport as well
• Adjust time formatting per MOS:TIME
• The last sentence can be shortened to The accident was the first fatal accident that American Airlines had experienced since Flight 476 in August 1955. The details of that crash aren't relevant here.

Aftermath

• There's some run-on sentences in this article that could use fixing. The one starting with After the crash is a typical example with three commas.

Aircraft

• When moving this to Background, it can probably become a single paragraph.
• Since the engines weren't significant to the crash, I don't think the details about them are needed. Same with the final sentence of the section.
• Providence to Tulsa isn't what I would usually call a "short-haul route", though I suppose the individual segments were short. Might be worth clarifying.

Passengers and crew

• I recommend using the same sentence structure to introduce the captain and first officer - right now they're completely different structures for the same set of information.
• With the injuries moved to Aftermath, this can be one paragraph.

Investigation

• The first paragraph seems like it might fit better in the Aftermath section.
• Change to The CAB held public hearings in Tulsa on February 27–28, 1957
• The paragraph reading During the flight... seems like it's important context for the previous paragraph - it might be worth rearranging some sentences.

Other

• The article can be added to Category:Transportation in Tulsa County, Oklahoma and Category:History of Tulsa County, Oklahoma
• For sources that have multiple pages, make sure to include the link to the second page in the citation.
• Are any images of the crash itself available? I imagine local newspapers may have had photos that could be valid for fair use.