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Reviewer: AJona1992 (talk · contribs) 18:34, 7 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

Infobox
  • The "length" section needs a {{duration}} template
Lead
  • Link interpolation
  • Billy Joe's song is a single, change accordingly
  • Too many instances with "the song", change it up
Background
  • ""Can't Stop Won't Stop contains portion from the song "Uptown Girl" which was written and sang by Billy Joel (pictured)." ---> ""Can't Stop Won't Stop contains a portion from the single "Uptown Girl" which was composed and recording by Billy Joel (pictured)."
  • "In 2009 interview with People Magazine," ---> "In a 2009 interview with People magazine,". Also when was the interview?
  • "Usher, whose private life has been highly documented after filing a divorce from wife Tameka Foster, " ---> irrelevant to the song.
  • "In March, 2010," ---> remove first coma
  • "Upon its release, Raymond v. Raymond received generally mixed reviews from music critics, who were ambivalent towards its songwriting and themes" ----> another irrelevant sentence.
  • Remove the entire paragraph that follows, irrelevant.
  • "Adams has previously written and produced Usher's 2010 single "OMG"" ---> needs past-tense tone
  • No need for Billy Joel's album
  • Link mixed
Composition
  • ""Can't Stop Won't Stop" is eurodance and dance-pop song that incorporates dubstep elements with a length of three minutes and 51 seconds" ---> "is a eurodance"
  •   Done
  • There needs to be a period before FN#16
  •   Done
  • No need for Usher's album Confessions and Nothing but the Beat
  • Synth is linked but what about hook?
  • I noticed that some of the descriptions directly derived from the reviews. Unless they are in quotations, it needs to be restated in your own words. Otherwise, it's plagiarism.
Reviews
  • "Erika Ramirez of Billboard" ---> Billboard
  • "Billy Joel's songs" ---> according to source it was only one of his songs so why does the sentence gives the feeling that it was more than one?
  • Again many of the reviews are not in your own words.
  • Just to step in this. What "are not in your own words"? Mean. The reviews can be as either quoted or paraphrased. I red the section and this is not an issue at all. Please elaborate. Thanks. —Hahc21 20:40, 7 July 2012 (UTC)Reply
Personnel
  • Delink cities and states
Charts
  • "debuted at the singles chart in South Korea." ---> "debuted on the singles chart in South Korea"

"The next week, the song sold additional 3,593 copies and felt to number 78" ----> remove "additional" and change "felt" to "fell".

References
  • FN#13, FN#14 publisherid?
  • FN#24 author?
  • FN#26 The A.V. Club does not need to be italicize

Putting article on hold until comments are addressed. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 20:05, 7 July 2012 (UTC)Reply

Passing articles great job you two. Best, Jonayo! Selena 4 ever 16:34, 12 July 2012 (UTC)Reply