Talk:Cod'ine/GA1

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Reviewer: Moneytrees (talk · contribs) 04:01, 1 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Reviewed for Wikipedia:WikiProject Good articles/GAN Backlog Drives/October 2020

I'll take this one and start filling it out. They were writin songs about Codine back in the 60s? I guess things don't change much. Moneytrees🏝️Talk🌴Help out at CCI! 04:01, 1 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for taking this on. Yes, it almost seems topical. ;) —Ojorojo (talk) 15:50, 1 October 2020 (UTC)Reply


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  1. It is reasonably well written.
    a (prose, spelling, and grammar):   b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):  
Well written, with some minor improvements:
For specificity, "health problem" in the lede could be replaced with "bronchial infection".
Done. —Ojorojo (talk) 15:18, 2 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
Opiate, Drug withdrawal, and New York City could be wikilinked.
Linked the first two, but NYC is well-known (MOS:OVERLINK#locations). —Ojorojo (talk) 15:18, 2 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
"Later, group retrospectives sometimes include it with the title "Codine Blues", such as The Amazing Charlatans (1996)." I'm a bit confused by this sentence. What a group retrospective is is unclear, and "include it with the title" could be rephrased to something clearer, such as "included it under the title".
1) Clarified with "album"; as both a noun and adjective, "retrospective" is used for "an exhibition or compilation showing the development of the work of a particular artist over a period of time" (New Oxford American Dictionary). 2) Changed; I've seen "under the title of" used in WP articles, but thought it was more Brit Eng. —Ojorojo (talk) 15:18, 2 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
I think #Release and reception could be reorganized, with the reception of the actual song first and then the reception of the album.
"She managed to shake her addiction, but it had a profound effect on her: the pain she experienced was compounded by a feeling of betrayal of trust and personal violation.", Is rather wordy and I think could be reworded slightly.
Trimmed and reworded. —Ojorojo (talk) 15:18, 2 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
"In 1964, Scottish folk singer Donovan recorded a demo version of "Cod'ine". He had success with another one of Sainte-Marie's compositions, "Universal Soldier", but it was not until 1992 that his rendition of "Cod'ine" (with the title "Codine") was released on the 1992 box set, Troubadour: The Definitive Collection 1964–1976." Is also rather wordy, and could be a little more clear. Moneytrees🏝️Talk🌴Help out at CCI! 18:26, 1 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
Trimmed and clarified; moved "Universal Soldier" to efn. —Ojorojo (talk) 15:18, 2 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
  1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.
    a (reference section):   b (citations to reliable sources):   c (OR):   d (copyvio and plagiarism):  
  2. It is broad in its coverage.
    a (major aspects):   b (focused):  
  3. It follows the neutral point of view policy.
    Fair representation without bias:  
  4. It is stable.
    No edit wars, etc.:  
  5. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
    a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales):   b (appropriate use with suitable captions):  
    An image of Codeine or Sainte-Marie could be used but I don't really think that's necessary. Moneytrees🏝️Talk🌴Help out at CCI! 04:37, 1 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
My oversight – added a free image from Commons. —Ojorojo (talk) 15:50, 1 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
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Overall a very interesting article about a great song that ended up being very predictive of modern musical trends. Just needs some minor cleanup and it'll be good to go. Moneytrees🏝️Talk🌴Help out at CCI! 18:26, 1 October 2020 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for the fixes, I'll pass this now. Moneytrees🏝️Talk🌴Help out at CCI! 15:22, 2 October 2020 (UTC)Reply
Wow, that went well. Thank you for your suggestions and pass. —Ojorojo (talk) 15:30, 2 October 2020 (UTC)Reply