Talk:Olek (artist)/GA1
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Latest comment: 13 years ago by Zanimum in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Racepacket (talk) 12:12, 5 June 2011 (UTC) Thank you for nominating this article. I enjoyed it. No disamb. links. Fn 2 has a is dead link to nymag.com.
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- Article needs a lead. Although there are introductory paragraphs, they cover new material rather than summarize what is below. For example, the yarn bomb quote should be moved to the body of the article.
- "First using crocheting as part of her art in 2003, and crocheted the windows of a burned-out, abandoned building near her 2005 residency in Utica, New York.[10]" - sentence needs a subject and verb.
- I've done a complete overhaul of that part: it was implying the windows were her first project, but she did student work before then. Working on that now.
- "was inspired "by a uniformed attendant holding the sign Hold the Handrail in a Taipei metro station".[14] Performers held placards of signs found by the artist, that were "emphatic, ironic or amused dialogue with their location."[13]"->"was inspired "by a uniformed attendant holding a "Hold the Handrail" sign in a Taipei metro station".[14] Performers held placards based on signs found by the artist, that were "emphatic, ironic or amused dialogue with their location."[13]"
- Changed.
- "ripped off" can mean stolen. The cnnmoney site says it was removed by the caretaker of the park. Perhaps you can find different words?
- Clarified.
- Exhibit dates are Aug 10 — Aug 27, 2011 so can we say "August 2011"?
- Pardon?
- "A 2011 solo show will be held at Jonathan LeVine Gallery.[26]"->"A solo show will be held at Jonathan LeVine Gallery in August 2011.[26]"
- Cool, thanks.
- "A 2011 solo show will be held at Jonathan LeVine Gallery.[26]"->"A solo show will be held at Jonathan LeVine Gallery in August 2011.[26]"
- Pardon?
- a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
- A. References to sources:
- As noted above fn 2 needs repair.
- Fixed, there was a space in the URL.
- Fn 6, 7 and 24 are bare URLs. I suggest using {{cite web}}.
- As noted above fn 2 needs repair.
- B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
- "Olek has exhibiting in the United States, Brazil, Costa Rica, France, Germany, Italy, Poland, and Turkey. " - needs footnote
- C. No original research:
- A. References to sources:
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- What is her educational background? Discuss it in the prose and not just the infobox.
- Expanded a bit.
- Please summarize any critical reception of her work.
- Despite the fact she's going to exhibit at the Smithsonian, I can't find any critical reviews of her work. The only commentary on her work seems to come from reporters who don't specialize in art critique.
- Has she written about her motivation or conception of her work?
- The closest to that seems to be the 2009 quote, can't find anything else comparable.
- What medium did she use prior to 2003?
- I can find mention of her prof liking her student work that involved crochet, but nothing about her other works, aside from what's on her official website.
- When did she immigrate from Poland to the United States?
- Can't find any sources for that. If I tweeted her, and she replied, could I cite her tweet?
- You could forward it to OTRS. However, it is a non-controversial fact that does not require a cite to a secondary source.
- Can't find any sources for that. If I tweeted her, and she replied, could I cite her tweet?
- What is her educational background? Discuss it in the prose and not just the infobox.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- I am placing the article on hold so that you may address the above noted concerns. Racepacket (talk) 12:49, 5 June 2011 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
January 8 reading
editWe are almost done:
- Technically, the lead should only contain facts that are included elsewhere in the article. Please consider moving the "Her creative philosophy is that "Life and art are inseparable."[10]" to the Career section, and then summarize her entire creative philosophy in one or two sentences in the lead.
- Please fix the [citation needed] in the second paragraph of the "Career" section.
- I would make the title in fn 23 upper and lower case.
Thank you for your hard work on this article. Racepacket (talk) 02:20, 8 June 2011 (UTC)
- I'm really sorry for stalling on this, I didn't realize how much of the subject I hadn't explored, before submitting the article for review. In trying to find the most definitive explanation of her first works using crocheting, to solve the citation needed tag that I had placed on the fact, I found one page that lead to another, including complex artist statements that would require me attending a fine arts university program to be able to condense.
- To try and reference some of the things highlighted in her early biographies is impossible. One of the events, a festival in Philadelphia, I really can't find any reliable references to it existing. Obviously, I've left it out. Anyway, here's my updates and expansions. -- Zanimum (talk) 00:53, 13 June 2011 (UTC)
Thank you for improving the article. Congratulations. Racepacket (talk) 07:59, 13 June 2011 (UTC)
- Thank you so much for your guidance, and patience with my delays. This is my first GAN ever, despite being on Wikipedia since 2002, and it was an interesting process. -- Zanimum (talk) 02:12, 14 June 2011 (UTC)