Talk:Diva (Beyoncé song)/GA2

GA Reassessment

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I am nominating this article for a reassessment because I feel there are still some issues with the article. The prose is not clear, references are not correctly formatted and others. I reviewed the article in the first place, but now feel it needs reassessment. Thank you. Novice7 | Talk 06:40, 2 January 2011 (UTC)

The second sentence is not clear and is confusing. Many instances of poor language "Although only officially released in the US, the song appeared on the charts in Australia".  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 16:14, 2 January 2011 (UTC)

The second paragraph of Background and release contains a lot of confusing sentences squeezed together. What I found:

• There are many similarities between Knowles' "Diva" and the song "A Milli" by Lil Wayne, mainly because both tracks are produced by Bangladesh. How can i fix that?

Adabow fixed it. Novice7 | Talk

• In an interview with MySpace, Knowles was asked whether she agreed that "Diva" is a woman's equivalent to "A Milli". She replied "It is, in a way....it wasn't consciously."[14] Consequently, the song became to be known as the feminine companion to Lil Wayne's A Milli How can i fix that?

Just correct the "She replied" part. Maybe merge it with the previous sentence?? Novice7 | Talk

• Some typographical errors.
• Reference formatting issues.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 16:14, 2 January 2011 (UTC)

Some references still lack "cite web", "cite news" templates. Novice7 | Talk

I do not really understand. Can you cite one? Please. Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:21, 7 January 2011 (UTC)

Resolved comments from Tbhotch™ and © 19:15, 5 January 2011 (UTC)

*Comments by Tbhotch™ and © 03:40, 4 January 2011 (UTC) "Diva" later received positive or mixed reviews -> positive or mixed, which of both?  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) "A Milli." -> "A Milli"., the point is not part of song's title  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) Its music video, directed by Melina -> Melina who?  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) "Single Ladies (Put a Ring on It)." -> As above  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) Background and release Later, Keyshia Cole -> Later, Cole  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) December 2008 that American R&B singer -> overlinked  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) US single from I Am... Sasha Fierce (2008), -> the album was mentioned before, so move the date above.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) on the same date.[6] On the same date -> or merge it or search synonyms  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) Composition a R&B song -> overlinked  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) by Bangladesh -> overlinked  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) Sasha", Knowles' alter ego -> Sasha", Knowles' alter ego,  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) Critical reception M Noting its -> M?  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) M Noting its similarity to "A Milli", Andy Kellman Allmusic chose "Diva" as the standout track from the album, -> re-worte it.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) to "Freakum Dress" and "Ring the Alarm" -> overlinked  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) The Observer -> Overlinked  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) is beloved]." -> and the [?  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) Chart performance and live performance  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) Chart performance and live performance -> Chart and live performance[s]  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) I Am... Tour -> uneeded italics.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) Music video on November 22, 2008[45] -> on November 22, 2008,[45]  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) was directed by Melina Matsoukas,  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) who worked with Knowles for several music videos.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) on iTunes on -> on the iTunes Store on  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) simultaneously with the "Halo" video -> overlinked  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) in that the video is in black and white -> reword it  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) and that Knowles -> remove "and that"  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) (a track from I Am... Sasha Fierce) -> (overlinked)  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 09:49, 4 January 2011 (UTC) Lead Bangladesh, Sean Garrett, and Knowles -> Shondrae "Bangladesh" Crawford, Sean Garrett and Knowles Isn't "Shondrae Crawford" enough? And, maybe the editor can mention he is popularly known as Bangladesh?? Novice7

• keep If I am able to say keep. Tbhotch^Talk and C. 05:38, 13 January 2011 (UTC)

Resolved comments from Novice7

-Background and release- The first three sentences of Background seem sloppy and poor to me. Example: Meanwhile, he showed it to American R&B singer Keyshia Cole, who liked the beat of the song, however did not like everything on the record. Later, Cole said she was going to sing the song, however, this time Knowles also wanted the track.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) Why is there a vertical bar after December 2008 that?  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) Again, ho was at that particular time working on her third studio album, Fantasy Ride, had remixed "Diva". The remix was supposed to be featured on her Fantasy Ride Mixtape - bad.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) Rewrite second para first sentence.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) However, its release was scrapped, and on January 20, 2009, "Diva" was released instead to urban radio[5] while "Halo" was sent for mainstream airplay on the same date.[6] On the same date, "Diva" was sent to rhythmic radio alone. – confusing. Why mention so much about Ego and Halo? Yes, it is needed because it shows the integral concept of the album, that is releasing one Single from "I Am..." and the other form "Sasha". -Composition- an R&B song, not a R&B song.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) link hip hop, grove and tempo separately.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) maybe link stuttering to Wikitionary? No need to link words Again, In an interview with MySpace, Knowles was asked whether she agreed that "Diva" is a woman's equivalent to "A Milli". She replied "It is, in a way....it wasn't consciously." – please rewrite.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) year after B'Day?  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) "Sasha", Knowles' alter ego can even be heard saluting her earning power in the song. – needs fix. I don't like the "can even be heard" part.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) -Critical reception- Link flagrant to Wikitionary? No need as mentioned before The EW review with drums and specification repeats (Composition & Critical). Remove it.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) picked out "Diva" as "a" standout. Two other tracks are also selected.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) Again, Observer's review repeats. (anthem thing)  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) Digital Spy repeats.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) Mariel Concepcion of Billboard "noted" that  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) Bill Lamb review repeats.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) The last para is too short. Merge it with above one.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) -Chart- The source does not say anything about Bubbling Under.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) From second paragraph, remove the "as the twelfth track" part.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) Last sentence needs fix.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) -Track listing- Typo Masterbeat. Also, is this needed? In my opinion, just "Diva (The Remixes)" is needed.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) -References- One redirect link. Check here.  Done Jivesh • Talk2Me 17:43, 5 January 2011 (UTC) No dab

-Music video-

• I'm not sure about NFCC, you might want to ask someone of the screenshot. Can you please explain?

Well, according to WP:NFCC policies (especially 8), it is to be used only if the reader get significant knowledge from it. Novice7 | Talk 06:19, 6 January 2011 (UTC)

But the pictures shows her Sasha Fierce glasses. Jivesh • Talk2Me 08:18, 7 January 2011 (UTC)

Okay, I'll ask Legolas. Novice7 | Talk 09:13, 7 January 2011 (UTC)