Talk:Dua Lipa (album)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hadger (talk · contribs) 04:02, 8 September 2020 (UTC)

I'll start reviewing this article soon. Hadger (talk) (contribs) 04:02, 8 September 2020 (UTC)

Background and release

• "back to England" - clarify that she was born in England to make this more clear
• Current wording is too close to Rolling Stone's "intent on taking a shot at a music career" wording; you could change this to: "... 15 to pursue a music career"
• Interview Magazine source doesn't cite Sylvia Young Theater School; you should include the Rolling Stone source at the end of that sentence (although I don't see where this source supports the use of the word "re-enroll")
• Where does the Noisey article support that she had started modeling? Is this referring to her use of Instagram?
• "...brought her wider exposure"
• The end of the first sentence of the second paragraph is too close to the original source's wording
• I'm slightly concerned about the use of London Evening Standard since there's no consensus on its reliability, but given that the source is used to cite an uncontroversial claim based on an interview, I think it's alright here.
• The given sources don't adequately support the sentence beginning "Work on her debut album began..." The Music Business Worldwide source supports that she started writing music, but not necessarily work on an album. Seems like the J. Cole/Nelly Furtado bit might have come from the Rolling Stones article cited in the previous sentence, but in context she's giving examples of artists that influenced her sound, which isn't quite as strong as saying that she was "seeking a sound marrying that of J. Cole and Nelly Furtado".
• I'm not sure the Music Feeds interview supports the claim that Lipa was "travel[ing] to promote music in the United States", given that the interview was in Australia. I'm also skeptical of using a video published in April 2016 to support the claim that work continued "throughout 2016".
• Is Breathe Heavy a reliable source? It seems like a self-published source. I think the Official Charts source linked in the Breathe Heavy article would be preferable. (The MNEK claim seems like pure rumor—one that turned out to be true, but it was speculation in the context of the article.) I think it would also be worth mentioning that she was in Los Angeles for collaborations.
• Third paragraph: find a better source than Breathe Heavy.
• Source for Lipa pushing back the release date in August 2016?
• Huge issue with close paraphrasing in the sentence that cites Idolator. (Also, italicize Idolator).
• Going to need some sort of introduction to that quote at the end of the section.

I'm seeing some significant issues with sourcing and occasional close paraphrasing so far. I'll continue reviewing the article soon. For now, please feel free to address the issues I've raised here. (I should note: I've intentionally avoided reviewing the intro for now, as I believe it will be easier to properly assess it once I've reviewed the rest of the article.) Hadger (talk) (contribs) 18:51, 8 September 2020 (UTC)

• Hey Hadger, I was just over looking the article and I noticed a few issues I wanted to address. I nominated this a while ago, before I fully researched all of the album's respective songs. For now, I am going to retract this nomination, do you mind failing it? Thanks for taking this on, I appreciate it. LOVI33 17:44, 9 September 2020 (UTC)

I'll go ahead and do that. Hadger (talk) (contribs) 01:09, 10 September 2020 (UTC)