Talk:Dynamite (BTS song)/GA1
Latest comment: 8 months ago by AryKun in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: AryKun (talk · contribs) 19:11, 2 March 2024 (UTC)
- Sorry for the delay.
- "band's first song fully recorded in English" maybe "band's first entirely English-language song"?
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:06, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "and takes influence from" to "and is influenced by"?
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:06, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "large amounts of commercial success" to "considerable commercial success" or just "commercial success"
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:06, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "which the members" specify that it's the members of BTS.
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:09, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- 'which is "energetic' to 'which was "energetic'
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:09, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "more PG friendly" I don't think "PG friendly" is a phrase
- The phrase 'PG friendly' isn't standard. How would you like me to handle it? Should I remove it or replace it with something else?Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:39, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- Link Suga at first mention.
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:09, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "including, King" Comma isn't necessary.
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:09, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "each member gets" to "each member [of BTS] gets"
- 'chorus as an "earworm"' The "as" is unnecessary.
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:09, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- The Reception section seems excessively positive; the one starred review included seems middling, but there's no discussion in the text of any aspects of the song that reviewers didn't like.
- "in just under 27 days of its exceeding the former milestone" Just mention the days after release, doing mental math here is confusing.
- I just put " in under 27 days" and removed the rest of the sentence to keep it simple. Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:50, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "800–900 million views" to 800 and 900 million views"
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:27, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "with two days of tracking" What's this mean?
- It means two days of the sales that were tracked. Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:14, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "Japan besides" to "Japan after"
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:27, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "by more than a 2.2x multiple" to "by a factor of more than 2.2"
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:26, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- "sold an additional 10,500 copies—2,748% increase—" Over what time period and an increase compared to when?
- "US, but their first" to "US and their first"
- Done Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:30, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- The world records are dubiously notable; Guinness is known for selling world records by making up random niche nonsense like "Most viewed YouTube music video in 24 hours by a K-pop group", and that looks like exactly what's here. World records also aren't accolades
- Is the Dynamite cover really eligible for PD? The stylizing seems to be more than simple geometry to me.
- It had been previously nominated for deletion but was kept. Btspurplegalaxy (talk) 6:17, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- Other image is properly used and licensed.
- Refs are properly formatted.
- AGF-ing on non-English refs.
- Spot-checks: Sources verified all claims made unless noted otherwise.
- Zornosa, Laura (August 21, 2020). "K-pop's BTS does it again, shattering records with all-English 'Dynamite'". Los Angeles Times.
- Jenkins, Craig (August 24, 2020). "BTS Is Way Ahead of Us". Vulture.
- Dodson, P. Claire (August 21, 2020). "BTS Releases 'Dynamite,' a Disco-Pop Boost for Hard Times". Teen Vogue.
- Bailey, Alyssa (August 21, 2020). "BTS' 'Dynamite' Lyrics Bring Much-Needed Joy To This Rough Year". Elle.
- Lee, Jae-lim (November 3, 2020). "BTS's 'Dynamite' reached No. 9 on Billboard's Pop Songs radio chart". Korea JoongAng Daily.
- Teh, Cheryl (March 12, 2021). "BTS will make history when they perform at the Grammys. Whether they take home an award or not, they've already won". Insider.com. Link's broken.
- "The Best Songs Of 2020". Uproxx.
- McIntyre, Hugh (April 6, 2021). "BTS's 'Dynamite' Is Now The Longest-Running Hot 100 Hit By A Korean Act". Forbes. Unreliable source, see WP:FORBESCON.
- All the Forbes sources are by "Senior Contributors" and need to be replaced since they receive no editorial oversight.
- Nominator has indicated that they will not be responding to comments, will be failing. AryKun (talk) 14:07, 27 March 2024 (UTC)
- If the nominator isn't willing to proceed, I can take their place and address the issues at hand. Btspurplegalaxy 💬 🖊️ 05:12, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- I've already failed it, but you can address the comments and renominate if you want. AryKun (talk) 19:38, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
- If the nominator isn't willing to proceed, I can take their place and address the issues at hand. Btspurplegalaxy 💬 🖊️ 05:12, 28 March 2024 (UTC)
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