Talk:First Battle of Springfield/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk · contribs) 09:52, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

I'll take a look at this shortly. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 09:52, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

Prelim

• No duplicated links
• No edit wars
• File:Hungarians in the American civil war (1913) (14762685895).jpg could probably do with another, more standard, us pd
  • Added
• Earwig reports copyvio unlikely

Lede and infobox

• "on a scout towards Springfield" "scouting mission"?
  • Rephased
• "north at around dark" > "north when darkness fell"?
  • Have rephrased this. "At around dark" seems the most natural to me, but some searches on google for that exact string suggests that this is primarily a regional or colloquial use.
• Why does the lede exclusively use "Federal" instead of "Union", as the infobox does?
  • So I've introduced this in the article as Federal (Union) now. Union is the traditional term, but Federal is starting to come into vogue now.
• Worth mentioning in the Lede the connection between the MSG and CSA
  • done
• "Frémont’s Body-Guard" this spelling of bodyguard is only used in the infobox
  • Based on the sources "Body Guard" without the hyphen is the historically accurate spelling, so I've switched over to that in the article
• Don't need ranks in the infobox
  • Removed, although they'll be invariably added back by somebody reading the article in the future, as pretty much always happens when I remove them from infoboxen
• Infobox reads as if the Prairie Scouts were a part of the bodyguard which I don't think was the case?
  • Should be a bit clearer now
• "Praire Scouts" sp
  • Oops
• You might want to fix the Operations to Control Missouri navbox; this battle isn't currently bolded out because it's a redirect
  • Fixed

Prelude

• Give Zagonyi his rank
  • Done
• Link Missouri River
  • Done

Battle

• "Late on October 24, Zagonyi and the bodyguard" try not to begin sections with dates
  • Added another sentence in here to lead off
• "the Federal ran into a small party" something missing here
  • Fixed
• "swung his troops to a detour to approach Springfield from the west"
  • removed
• Lede says Zagonyi's report was "at the expense of the Prairie Scouts" but main text only says "at the expense of other Federal soldiers"
  • Have made this a bit more consistent now
• "has two companies charging with Zagonyi charging through a gap"
  • Done

Aftermath

• Could give Johnston his rank, but it's post-war so not necessary
  • I don't think it's necessary, given that this is long postwar
• Would it be appropriate to add some of these casualty figures to the infobox?
  • I don't know how helpful it would be, given the divergency among the sources. Anything from Zagonyi's report is suspect, and I personally doubt that Johnston would have any particular way of knowing much about this battle

References

• References look good. AGF for print sources.
• This provides some information about modern memorialisation of the battle
  • Have added a sentence about this

@Hog Farm: Hi, that's all I have for now. Will await your responses. Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 10:48, 10 August 2023 (UTC)

@Pickersgill-Cunliffe: - Thanks for the review! I've responded above. Hog Farm _Talk 02:34, 14 August 2023 (UTC)

@Hog Farm: Passing this article as satisfying the GA criteria. My apologies for taking so long to get back to this! Pickersgill-Cunliffe (talk) 15:24, 21 August 2023 (UTC)