Talk:George Brett (general)/GA1

GA Review

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I'll be reviewing this article shortly. Ealdgyth - Talk 14:10, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

   a couple of spots that need some prose massaging

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   One quotation needs a direct citation on it

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Specific concerns

• World War I section: "Brett departed for the Western Front in November 1917 suffered a case of appendicitis and lost his flight status." there is something missing between 1917 and suffered, but I'm not sure what the word should be.

 Done Re-phrased. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:49, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

• Lots of sentences starting "He..." which makes the prose feel choppy. Try to rework some?

 Done I've given it a go, removing a few of these. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:49, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

• Same for "In..."

 Done I've given it a go, removing a few of these. Hawkeye7 (talk) 21:49, 9 March 2009 (UTC)

• YOu need a citation for the quotations in the last paragraph of World War II.

 Done

I've put the article on hold for seven days to allow folks to address the issues I've brought up. Feel free to contact me on my talk page, or here with any concerns, and let me know one of those places when the issues have been addressed. If I may suggest that you strike out, check mark, or otherwise mark the items I've detailed, that will make it possible for me to see what's been addressed, and you can keep track of what's been done and what still needs to be worked on.