Talk:HIStory: Past, Present and Future, Book I/GA2

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Well-written

• Lead section.
  • In the lead sentence of the lead paragraph, put "-" between "two" and "disc". For the third sentence of the same paragraph, change "Recorded throughout the latter of 1994 and..." to "Recorded during late 1994 and...".

 Done Crystal Clear x3 22:21, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • In the last sentence of the second paragraph, change "...songs, "You Are Not Alone"; in 2007..." to "...songs, "You Are Not Alone". In 2007...".

 Done Crystal Clear x3 22:21, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • For the final sentence of the final paragraph regarding the 2001 reissues and four million copies sold worldwide, as of what date? Specify.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 23:39, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• Background and production section.
  • In the lead sentence of the opening paragraph, it mentions the tabloid press. Which tabloids? Specify. Ditto for the tabloids mentioned in the third sentence. For the fourth sentence of that same paragraph, who reported that Jackson had offered to purchase the bones of Merrick?

Various tabloids reported things about Jackson, such as the alleged attempt to purchase the bones of Merrick Crystal Clear x3 23:19, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • For the third paragraph's lead sentence, when did Jackson start taking the painkillers? In the fourth paragraph, what clinic did Jackson enter to rehabilitate himself? When were the dates of the Daily Express and Daily Mirror for the respective sentences listed? In the final sentence of this paragraph, when did Rivera set up the mock trial?

 Done Crystal Clear x3 23:28, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • For the fourth paragraph's fourth album, list release years for Thriller and Bad since Off the Wall and Dangerous both have their dates mentioned. In the final sentence, the rerelease of the album sold four million copies worldwide. As of when?

 Done Crystal Clear x3 23:19, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• Composition section.
  • Sounds listed in this section do not appear when printed.

Can you please clarify how I can fix that problem? Thanks, Crystal Clear x3 22:21, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • For The Notorious B.I.G. in the fifth sentence of the final paragraph, put ", aka Biggie Smalls. after the rapper's name.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 22:18, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• Controversey and influence on popular culture section. Dispute regarding lyrics of "They Don't Care About Us" subsection.
  • For the June 15 listing by The New York Times in the lead sentence of the opening paragraph, was that in 1995?

 Fixed Crystal Clear x3 22:18, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • In the statement that Jackson released that is blocked, use {{Cquote}} to put emphasis on his statement.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 22:18, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • In the third sentence following Jackson's statement, who were the two members of the Jewish community? Specify.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 22:18, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• Controversey and influence on popular cultrue section. Music videos subsection.
  • Use {{Cquote}} for Nagib's comments on Jackson's video in Brazil.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 22:18, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • In the third sentence of the paragraph following Nagib's statement, what prison was the second video filmed in along with when and where? Also list when the footage of other images taking place.

The source did not describe locations and dates used for the filming of the second music video. Crystal Clear x3 23:12, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • In the lead sentence of the second paragraph following Nagib's statement, spell out ICC.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 22:18, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• Promotion section.
  • Reword the lead sentence of the second paragraph. It is confusing to read.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 23:12, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• Release and reception section.
  • The "furious" listed in the second sentence of the lead paragraph could be WP:PEACOCK. Where is the sourcing for this sentence?

 Fixed

• • In the second paragraph's lead paragraph, should there be a " after "Beat It."? Hunter has a start quote, but not a close quote.

 Fixed Crystal Clear x3 23:39, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • For the final sentence of the final paragraph, on its multiple-disc album of all-time for a solo artist, as of what date? Specify.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 23:39, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• Singles section.
  • For the last sentence of the lead paragraph, change to "With a US$9 million music video production budget, "Scream" is the most expensive video ever made as of 2010."

 Done Crystal Clear x3 23:28, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • In the lead sentence of the second paragraph, when did "You Are Not Alone" become the first song debut? Exact date.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 01:16, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

• • For the second sentence of the third paragraph, change territories to nations. Territory could mean anything.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 23:28, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• • List the peak dates for "They Don't Care About Us" in the fourth paragraph for all charts listed.
  • In the last paragraph's second sentence, when did the song peak?

Regarding listing the single's peak dates, is it really necessary to list them? In my opinion, specific information like that should be included in the song's article, rather than the albums article..... Crystal Clear x3 01:24, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

Factually accruate and verifiable.

• List references for Track listing (including Notes subsection) and Album credits sections. Use "All come from this ^[reference] unless noted." for each section to assist.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 04:03, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

• Several references are offline so WP:AGF is assumed.
• More information is required in Reference 56. Use WP:CITET as a guide.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 04:01, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

• Expand search information for Reference 59. A general link up does not cut it.

I've made the link into a treelink. Crystal Clear x3 04:06, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

• Information not listed in Reference 65.

 Fixed Crystal Clear x3 04:01, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

• Information is not listed in the specific location in Reference 67.

 Fixed Crystal Clear x3 04:24, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

• Reference 68 - italicize La Repubblica, and put Italian in language listing. Use WP:CITET to assist on this.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 04:01, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

• More detailed information needed for Reference 71 like book publisher, publisher's location, and year of publication.

I've added more information to the reference, although I could not find any information on where it was published. Crystal Clear x3 04:18, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

• Language information for references listed are needed for 73, 74, 75, 76, 78, 79, 80, 81, 83, 85, 86, 88, 89, 90, 92, 93, 94, 95, and 96.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 04:44, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

• Information not found in Reference 77.

 Fixed Crystal Clear x3 23:41, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

Broad in coverage.

• No issues. Covers aspect of the album and its history.

Neutral.

• No issues. Presents all aspects of the album.

Stable.

• No issues. Recent edits have been to prepare for GA Review.

Images.

• All images valid.
• Sounds listed in Composition section of article do not appear when article is printed out. Please fix.

Can you please clarify how I can fix that problem? Thanks, Crystal Clear x3

• Captions on all images need to show date and location of pictures taken.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 22:18, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

• If there are plans to push this to WP:FA, alt text is required for all images shown.

 Done Crystal Clear x3 22:18, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

Overall

• Hold. Lot of work to do, but it can be done.

Reviewer: Chris (talk) 21:13, 16 May 2010 (UTC)

I've addressed all of the issues you've listed above. Crystal Clear x3 04:44, 17 May 2010 (UTC)

Passed. Good job. Chris (talk) 14:26, 17 May 2010 (UTC)