Talk:Hurricane Lorenzo (2007)/GA1
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Latest comment: 13 years ago by Titoxd in topic GA Review
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Reviewer: Titoxd(?!? - cool stuff) 05:57, 29 May 2011 (UTC)
- It is reasonably well written.
- a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- … it formed in the Bay of Campeche off the east coast of Mexico from a tropical wave. — "east coast" here is imprecise, since it could mean the Caribbean. If anything, mention that the BoC is in the Gulf of Mexico.
- … Lorenzo intensified from a 35 mph (55 km/h) tropical depression to an 80 mph (130 km/h) hurricane. — Both of these numbers should be hyphenated.
- Overall there were six deaths in the country, five in Puebla and of which three were a family that perished in a landslide. — confusing sentence structure, please rephrase. Also, mention where the other death was located for completeness.
- … it traversed much of the Caribbean Sea before developing an area thunderstorms on September 21. — fix
- … Initially a Hurricane Hunters flight was scheduled to investigate the system — add comma after "initially"
- … In its formative stages, the depression executed a small cyclonic loop.[1] — "cyclonic" is excessive jargon in this case.
- Primarily affected along the coast were small fishing villages, — awkward passive voice
- a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
- It is factually accurate and verifiable.
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):
- It is broad in its coverage.
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- The impact section is too small. See es:Huracán Lorenzo (2007) for more detail that could easily be added to the article.
- Is an aftermath section needed in this case?
- a (major aspects): b (focused):
- It follows the neutral point of view policy.
- Fair representation without bias:
- Fair representation without bias:
- It is stable.
- No edit wars, etc.:
- No edit wars, etc.:
- It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
- Overall:
- Pass/Fail:
- See the points above. Titoxd(?!? - cool stuff) 05:57, 29 May 2011 (UTC)
- Pass/Fail:
Alright, I got the grammary stuff. Some of it I just changed around the wording (so it wasn't exactly your suggestion). As for the Spanish article, I think I got the majority of the good stuff out of it. --♫ Hurricanehink (talk) 20:37, 29 May 2011 (UTC)
- The modifications are satisfactory. Passed. Titoxd(?!? - cool stuff) 06:50, 30 May 2011 (UTC)