Talk:I Shall Not Be Moved (poetry collection)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Dr. Blofeld (talk · contribs) 07:57, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

Lead

• "She began, early in her writing career, of alternating the publication of an autobiography and a volume of poetry". = Early in her writing career she began alternating the publication of an autobiography and a volume of poetry.
• "Most critics agree that Angelou's poetry is more interesting when she recites them." them would equate to poems rather than poetry.

1st 2 comments addressed.

• " all people," Really? Seems a bit generalized.

Changed to "universal experiences of humans".

Background

• "she has been best known for her autobiographies.[4] Many of Angelou's readers identify her as a poet first and an autobiographer second,[4]" Seem to contradict yourself if many of her readers identify her more as a poet. perhaps something like "to non-readers she is best known for her autobiographies but many of Angelou's readers identify her primarily as a poet."

I think I disagree, since I've used this phrase in other Angelou poetry articles; nonetheless, I've removed the phrase about how she's identified and combined the idea with the critics' view of her poetry.

• Bloom also believes that Angelou's poetry is more interesting when she recites them. Ditto.

Fixed.

• "Bloom also believes that Angelou's poetry is more interesting when she recites them. Bloom calls her performances "characteristically dynamic",[5] and says that Angelou "moves exuberantly, vigorously to reinforce the rhythms of the lines, the tone of the words. Her singing and dancing and electrifying stage presence transcend the predictable words and phrases".[5]" Not sure why all of this is relevant to this poetry collection.

Because this is more background about her poetry, and it supports the statement about the power of her poetry when it's recited or performed.

Themes

• "hard work. He says, "In Angelou's writings, rarely is there anyone who does not work. Everyone of her characters—singers, dancers, railway workers, etc.—works hard" Repetition of hard work...

Changed first instance to "labor".

• ccording to Howe, Angelou's poem "Human Family", which focuses on the similarities of all people, sums up the themes, as demonstrated by the line "We are more alike, my friends, than we are unalike", she presents throughout the volume. Could be polished a little and reworded.

Fixed.

Reviews

• Very short, I can see that it didn't receive much critical attention but given Angelou's status you'd expect more critical evaluation.

Yes, you would think. I've found that most of the criticism of Angelou's poetry is of her more well-known poems, like "On the Pulse of Morning". Critics, at least those who review poetry in journals, don't consider her all that important, which is why very few reviews exist, especially of the poems in her older works like this one. It's my goal to create another article here (i.e., Poetry of Maya Angelou), but more research needs to be done. Perhaps then I'll be able to expand upon the "Background" section here at the very least. I assure you, I've done the best I could, with the available sources, and its very comparable to other articles about Angelou's poetry.

Fair enough.♦ Dr. Blofeld 20:28, 30 August 2013 (UTC)

Overall I must say that I think this really needs a little further improvement before I'm ready to pass for GA.♦ Dr. Blofeld 08:21, 27 August 2013 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, Doc, I appreciate it. I hope that I've addressed your concerns to your satisfaction. Christine (Figureskatingfan) (talk) 20:13, 30 August 2013 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it reasonably well written?

   A. Prose quality:

   B. MoS compliance:

2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?

   A. References to sources:

   B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:

   C. No original research:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. Major aspects:

   B. Focused:

4. Is it neutral?

   Fair representation without bias:

5. Is it stable?

   No edit wars, etc:

6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?

   A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:

   B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Looks OK for GA but I think it would need quite some work if it is to pass FA.♦ Dr. Blofeld 20:28, 30 August 2013 (UTC)