Talk:It Only Hurts When I'm Breathing/GA1

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Reviewer: Novice7 (talk) 04:41, 23 July 2011 (UTC)

Hello Ipod! I'll be reviewing this article. Novice7 (talk) 04:41, 23 July 2011 (UTC)

Lead

• Although an official music video for "It Only Hurts when I'm Breathing" was never filmed, it was given a promotional music video, taken from a performance for the concert film Up! Live in Chicago (2003) – The only confusion in the lead. Is the comma (after music video) really needed? I mean, when I read it loud, I feel the pause is unnecessary.
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Background

• Twain said of the track, "This is the only heartbreak song on the new CD. It's called 'It Only Hurts when I'm Breathing', a chance for all of us to catch our breath here."[2 – cut the quote. Maybe: Twain said of the track "This is the only heartbreak song on the new CD. [...] a chance for all of us to catch our breath here"?
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Composition

• "It Only Hurts when I'm Breathing" is a song whose country "Green" version is of three minutes and nineteen seconds in length, and pop "Red" version is of three minutes and twenty seconds in length.[7] could you rewrite this? Also, what about the Blue version?
  • Sure, what is it exactly that's confusing or bothering you? Also, I put Green and Red because they're the main versions. Do you feel blue is necessary? -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 05:14, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
    • I've done something. Take a look. Novice7 (talk) 06:02, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
      • Seems fine with me :) -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 16:43, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
• The track is ballad that lies – The track is "a" ballad..
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• Is The Daily Campus reliable? It is a student newspaper (which are not considered reliable)
  • I think so. It is the third-largest in New England and from a very prestigious university. Is there any Wikipedia guideline against it? -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 05:14, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
    • There are many threads at RSN... Novice7 (talk) 06:02, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
      • From those conversations it seems that established one are reliable for non-controversial claims, and I'd consider the composition for a song so. I mean, you don't need a degree to hear music and write a review on it. I think that it would definitely be considered unreliable for anything concerning news, science, and maybe even celebrity gossip (but music opinion), I think is fine. What about you? -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 16:43, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
        • Then it's okay :) Novice7 (talk) 04:14, 30 July 2011 (UTC)

Critical

• Is the non-free media needed? I don't think it passes NFCC.
  • I think so. It is written about in live performances and was used as the song's music video. I don't see why it doesn't pass NFCC. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 05:14, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
    • NFCC#8, NFCC1? Novice7 (talk) 06:02, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
      • There might a free photo that could be used. However, not completely equivalent because these are the shots based on the music video. If there were, maybe it would be removed, but there is none. Trust me. I have searched Flickr constantly and numerously, and there is nothing from that Chicago concert. As for NFCC8, maybe there is a better still? -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 16:43, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
        • Is there a scene in the video which cannot be explained by words? Then, it could be uploaded. Novice7 (talk) 04:14, 30 July 2011 (UTC)
          • Removed.
• Stephen Thomas Erlewine of Allmusic noted the song's absence from Twain's Greatest Hits (2004) album, and said it was not greatly missed.[14] – However, Stephen Thomas...?
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Chart

• The following week, the track ascended to number forty-three,[22] and, after thirteen weeks on the chart, on the week ending it reached its peak at number eighteen, where it remained for three consecutive weeks.[20] – missing text. Also, the given source does not say anything about the song's stay at number eighteen for three weeks.
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Live performances

• No issues

Cover version

• His performance was received well be judges Ellen DeGeneres (who comapred Lynche's delivery to that of Luther Vandross), Kara DioGuardi, and Randy Jackson; judge Simon Cowell felt Lynche's song selection poor, deeming the song too feminine for him.[27] – typo.
  • Done.

Tracklisting

• Source please. You can use {{Cite music release notes}} for this.
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• The infobox lists Digital download too. But I cannot find anything about that in the article.
  • Along with the rest of Up!, it is available for digital download. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 05:14, 29 July 2011 (UTC)

References

• Ref #3 and #4 → Remove the Gfa.radioandrecords.com part. It's not needed.
  • I think it's needed. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message}
• Ref #15 → remove BMI.com (not needed)
  • Same. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 05:14, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
• Ref #19 → the link says Hot 100 while the reference title says Country Songs.
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• Ref #25 → unnecessary capitalization of "T" in "IT".
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Media

• The single cover needs a specific source. Maybe a link to the image?
  • What sort of source? Which one works?
    • They're not of the same size... You can add that you scanned from the CD cover. Novice7 (talk) 06:02, 29 July 2011 (UTC)

Links

• One DAB
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• No dead links (although a Newslibrary link appears to be broken/expired)
  • All links work for me. -- ipodnano05 * ^{leave@message} 05:17, 29 July 2011 (UTC)

That's all! On hold and good luck. Novice7 (talk) 04:42, 29 July 2011 (UTC)

Pass :) Novice7 (talk) 09:51, 31 July 2011 (UTC)