Talk:Jill Abbott/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: BrickHouse337 (talk · contribs) 21:41, 15 May 2013 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   Fairly well written, and fairly well copyedited. A few concerns:

• "In 1984, Dickson returned to the role, and though she stated that she would never leave, she was replaced by Walton in 1987, who continues to portray the role." Need to reword. Perhaps, "In 1984, Dickson returned to the role, and though she stated that she would never leave, she was replaced by Walton in 1987, who continues to portray the character to present time."
• "According to a birth certificate shown onscreen in 2003, Jill's birth year was revised to 1957". Also need to reword. Perhaps, "In 2003, Jill's birth certificate confirmed the year of her birth as 1957."
• In characterization, it gives a bit too much history on the character's professions. "In 1973, Jill was an 18-year-old manicurist who had an education, but grew up with limited means. She eventually became a successful executive at Jabot Cosmetics and later was CEO of Chancellor Industries. In 2009, Jill became broke and opened up a secret nail salon miles away from Genoa City, returning her to her original profession as a manicurist...,etc." Need to reword. Perhaps, "Jill is known as a businesswoman, after working as a manicurist during her youth. Walton has said that she wants to see Jill's business side incorporate into the storyline more, stating: "That's what Jill has always done, and she does it well. She was a really successful businesswoman. Jill did a lot of foolish things, but she was a savvy businesswoman." Additionally, Walton described Jill's business as the "core of the whole character", stating: "Jill is really a part of me – this is a unique job in that part of me does live as Jill, and I know Jill is a very savvy businesswoman."
• Need a comma after "Of her relationship with ex-con Larry Warton (Shark Fralick)."
• It seems that the character's storylines may not include all of her actual storylines over the years, but I don't see that as a huge ordeal, and it can be fixed over time.

Done. And I'm aware of the storylines discrepancies, and yes, they can be fixed over time. Creativity97 21:58, 15 May 2013 (UTC)

1. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

• Looks fine; all of the sources are reliable and verifiable; good job.

1. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

   Well covered as far as focus.

2. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

3. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

4. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Per Wikipedia policies, only one non-free image is allowed to represent a fictional character. Given this, I suggest the Brenda Dickson image be removed, as Walton is the current portrayer.

Done. Creativity97 21:58, 15 May 2013 (UTC)

1. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Overall, this article generally meets the GA criterion. After my concerns above are addressed, I will return to pass/fail the article. Cheers, --Brick House 337 21:41, 15 May 2013 (UTC)

Fixed all of the concerns addressed. Let me take this chance to thank you so much, BrickHouse337, for being so fast and prompt with this review. It is greatly appreciated; not only that, you are helping turn around today's soap articles on Wikipedia. Again, thanks! Regards, Creativity97 21:58, 15 May 2013 (UTC)

Thankyou so much BrickHouse337 for your speedy review :) It means a lot to c97 and myself. Arre 06:20, 16 May 2013 (UTC)

Thank you both for your kind words. Apologies for the delay here; I gave the article one last read through and it looks pretty good for now. Pass --Brick House 337 20:40, 16 May 2013 (UTC)