Talk:Joel Heath/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 15:54, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

Me once again! MWright96 (talk) 15:54, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "He played in 39 games, starting 24," - starting 24 of them  Done
• Cincinnati, Ohio, Big Ten are all dab link

These are redirects. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 18:48, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

Have fixed the redirects myself. MWright96 (talk) 19:38, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

Early years

• "and 6.5 sacks his junior year in 2009." - adjust the text it bolds so it reads as during his junior year in 2009  Done
• "He totaled five sacks his senior season" - change too Heath totaled five sacks throughout his senior season  Done
• "his senior season in 2010." - for his senior season in 2010  Done
• "He was named to the Cincinnati Enquirer’s All-Area (Division II-VI) Team his junior season." - for his junior season  Done
• Cincinnati, Ohio, SuperPrep and PrepStar are dab links

These are redirects. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 18:49, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

See my response in the previous sub-section. MWright96 (talk) 19:38, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

College career

• "playing in five games in 2012 and nine games in 2013," - playing in five games in 2012 and a further nine in 2013,  Done
• "He played in 13 games, starting 12," - Heath played in 13 games, of which he started all but one,  Done
• "half a sack and a half a tackle for loss" - being defeated  Done

Not sure what this means. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 18:48, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

@WikiOriginal-9: What I meant to say what the sentence that this particular text is part of should read as He recorded three tackles, half a sack and a half a tackle in his team's defeat in the January 2015 Cotton Bowl Classic.

• "He missed two games due to injury." - As I have mentioned in other reviews, is there any information to state the exact type of injury the player had?  Done
• "Heath played in 39 games, starting 24, during his college career." - Heath played in 39 games, and started 24 of them, during his college career.  Done

Professional career

• "He played in 12 games, starting 6, in 2016 and recorded 5 solo tackles, 3 tackle assists and 2.0 sacks." - {{xt|In 2016, Heath played in twelve games, of which he started in half of them, and recorded five solo tackles, three tackle assists and 2.0 sacks."  Done

Once again I'll put this review on hold until the queries raised above have been addressed. This is defintely one of your better works so good work

so far. MWright96 (talk) 17:23, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

I think I've fixed everything. Thoughts? WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 22:35, 15 November 2017 (UTC)

@WikiOriginal-9: Okay then, another GA promoted. MWright96 (talk) 09:03, 16 November 2017 (UTC)