Talk:John Y. Brown Jr./GA2

GA Review

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GA review (see here for criteria)

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The article meets all the good article criteria as-is, so I'm going to pass it. It's very clear and readable. I have a few minor comments which go beyond the GA criteria; you may address them or disregard them as you wish. —Designate (talk) 23:31, 19 December 2010 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

   - I think it would be smoother to put the family members later in the lead. Reading the first paragraph was jarring for me, especially the "Currently single" which is off-tone for a biography. The first paragraph is usually the most basic summary of the subject's identity. Also, I don't like the phrase "although he may be best-known for...". It seems weaselly for the lead paragraph.
   - There are a few odd terms that ought to be linked – "U.S. Congress", "wood-roasted chicken", "Mrs. Kentucky". Maybe "bachelor's degree" as that means different things in different countries.
   - "old political foe" should probably be reworded, such as "former political foe".

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

   I think some of the footnoting is excessive (but others may disagree with me). The "In Kentucky's Governors" paragraph cites the same footnote four sentences in a row. It would help the article's clarity if some of the footnotes were condensed.

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

   No obvious problems, as you apparently wrote the whole article yourself.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   The image of Collins should use the "upright" option so it's not so big. It would be good to correct the rotation if possible.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Good work. Good luck on the GT.

Reviewer: Designate (talk) 23:31, 19 December 2010 (UTC)