Talk:Kaivalya Upanishad/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Sainsf (talk · contribs) 05:23, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

@Nvvchar: Will review. Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 05:23, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

• Thanks for the review. I have collaborated with User:Ms Sarah Welch who will also respond.Nvvchar. 13:43, 3 February 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• Why is the name in italics while heading is not? It is not uniform in the text either.

• Fixed. Both are italics.

• Do not use citations in the lead. Use them only in main text.

• Indeed. I moved some text and all sources from the lead into the main article. I had to move some text so that nothing in the lead appears unsourced/unsupported in the main article.

• Upanishads linked twice.

• Fixed.

Etymology

• Who is Deussen?

• Added, wikified and source there verified

Chronology

• Link Shiva and Hinduism as they are first mentioned.

• Done by @Nvvchar

Structure

• What is a poetic meter?

• It should have been Vedic meter, wikified and added explanation

• Duplinks: Mundaka Upanishad and Shvetashvatara Upanishad
• thus referencing them, yet building Comma should be replaced with "And".

• Done by @Nvvchar

Content

• Only one duplink : Brahma.

• Done by @Nvvchar

• translate Deussen and other scholars other scholars is vague, how about et. al.?

• Fixed

• You forget to mention "states the text" in places ,it is almost as if you are saying all this. Introduce that phrase regularly.

• Done by @Nvvchar

Commentaries

• Sarvepalli Radhakrishnan translated it in his 1953 book The Principal Upanishads. No source for this?

• Added

• published first in 1971 "first published".

• Done by @Nvvchar

@Sainsf: Thanks for the review. Your detailed review and points were helpful. @Nvvchar: Please double check my edits and if I missed anything or duplinks, please fix. Also, both @Redtigerxyz and you started this article a year ago, an initiative that is commendable. [[User:@Sainsf:|Ms Sarah Welch]] (talk) 00:44, 4 February 2016 (UTC)

• @Sainsf: The text has been slightly modified by Ms Sarah Welch due to shifting of references from the lead. All review issues have been addressed by her thoroughly. Pl see.Nvvchar. 01:20, 4 February 2016 (UTC)

@Nvvchar: Promoted. Congrats! Sainsf <^>_{Talk all words} 05:46, 6 February 2016 (UTC)

• Thank you very much,@Sainsf:.Nvvchar. 05:56, 7 February 2016 (UTC)