Talk:Ken Hunt (pitcher)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 18:08, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

Will review this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 18:08, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Hunt's nationality is missing from the first sentence as is convention in any biographical article
• "However, his control problems resurfaced in the minors" - minor leagues

Early life

• "He grew up in that town," - should that be changed to city?
• "but only went to the school" - try to use an alternative other than school since Brigham is a university

Career

• Briefly explain Gabe Paul's role in the Redlegs on the first mention of his name
• Wikilink the term scout to Scout (sport)
• "Seventy-five walks in 54 innings pitched " - I believe the text in bold should be worded as 75 for consistency with MOS:NUMERAL
• "contributed to a 2-5 record" - the hyphen should be replaced by an en dash
• "and an earned run average (ERA) of 9.00 exactly." - the word "exactly" is not needed
• "and his record was 4-14." - en dash please
• "However, his ERA came down a little to 6.66," - better; lowered to 6.66
• "Hunt shoved his walk total down to 134" - lowered his walk total to 134
• "in eight innings in a 4-2 victory" - the hyphen will need to be replaced with an en dash
• "May 23, despite allowing five hits and six walks in ​7 2⁄3 innings," - The sentence should start as On May 23,
• "beating Don Drysdale in a 2-0 victory." - another hyphen that needs to be replaced with an en dash
• Wikilink Sports Illustrated the first time it is mentioned
• "Hunt did throw in the minors," - minor leagues
• "He had a 2-8 record between those teams" - again another hyphen that should be substituted with an en dash
• "Ironically, he gave up fewer earned runs per game" - the word "Ironically" is informal and should be removed or changed to a more formal word
• "he gave up fewer earned runs per game" - how about the word relinquished instead for variety?
• "he had a 7-9 record" & " he had a 7-6 record" are two more instances of the hyphen being better off replaced by an en dash in both instances
• "He also got picked up by the Baltimore Orioles' organization" - was also chosen

Later life

• Wikilink the term bachelor's degree and the Utah Sports Hall of Fame

References

• Reference 1 is missing the date it was published
• Reference 5 should have the work as Baseball-Reference not baseball-reference for consistency

Am going to the review on hold to allow the nominator to action/respond to the queries raised above. MWright96 (talk) 18:57, 4 April 2020 (UTC)

• @Sanfranciscogiants17: Now promoting to GA class. I have made some changes to the article. You used the longer em dash (—) not the shorter en dash (–) that is standard on Wikipedia. MWright96 (talk) 06:48, 5 April 2020 (UTC)