Talk:Kingdom Hearts 358/2 Days/GA2

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Reviewer: PresN (talk · contribs) 21:50, 28 October 2013 (UTC)

Right; this has been hanging out in the queue so long that I'm going to go ahead and review it even though I'm in the SE wikiproject- I've never played this game or edited the article, as far as I remember. Review will start shortly. --PresN 21:50, 28 October 2013 (UTC)

Images

Two fair-use; both look fine, though the FURs would need to be longer if you take this to FAC.

Stability

Stable, though there was a dust-up a few weeks ago about including the release dates of the remake/compilation in the infobox; I remember the resulting WT:VG thread.

Lead

• "The story is told from the perspective of Roxas whose daily life in Organization XIII and his relationship with fellow Organization members Axel and Xion." - sentence fragment.
• "The game was decided to be made on the Nintendo DS prior to initial plans" - huh?
• "Roxas chosen as main protagonist during initial planning" - Roxas was chosen, I think.

Gameplay

• Any citations for the second paragraph?
• Link Final Fantasy
• Maybe define what a Keyblade is when you first say it, since only previous players of the series would know (and link it here rather than in the characters section).
• "The second stage of a Final Limit is normally a different or powered-up version of the first" - what's a Final Limit? You were talking about Limit Breaks in the last sentence. In fact, these last two sentences in the last paragraph don't make a lot of sense without context.
• Why are you talking about the Tokyo Game Show?
• "in that everyone will draw"- wrong tense

Plot

• "and her existence prevents Sora's memory from being completed" - memory from being restored? from being completely restored? It's an odd verb choice.
• "who Xemnas altered to act on her purpose" - don't think "on" is the preposition to use here
• "into Twilight Town's virtual simulation" - 'into a virtual simulation of Twilight Town'
• Can I just say that the overall plot of the KH series is really, really weird?
• You don't need to re-link KH2 and KH:Chain of Memories in the Story section

Development

• "2008 Jump Festa" - is it actually Festa?
• "The Nintendo DS was chosen as the system before plans were decided" - like the lead, a strange concoction. Maybe 'The Nintendo DS was chosen as the system before design work began on the game'?
• "This was thought during Kingdom Hearts II" - you mean the idea was thought of during the development of KH2, right?
• "The title, "358/2 Days", is a code that Nomura has stated the player will understand the meaning of at the very end of the game, though hinted in a recent trailer, and the word "day" is attached to the title as a reference to the daily life of Organization XIII" - sounds like this sentence was written before the game was released; why not just say what the title means instead?

Reception

• "average score on Metacritic is 75%" - it's just 75
• Why is RPGFan italicized?
• Although the by-review-outlet organization is fine, it would be better to organize it by theme, so that all of the concerns about the storyline are together, for example- it just makes it easier to see what problems/praises the game had overall across reviews.
• "As of August 2009, the game has sold 490,000 copies in the region. It is also one of the" - 'By August 2009, the game sold', and 'It was also one of the'
• "7 awards on Nintendo 2009 Power awards" - '7 awards in the Nintendo'.
• "Kingdom Hearts 358/2 Days had a special edition of the Nintendo DSi" - the game didn't have the edition, a special KH358/2-themed edition of the DSi was released alongside the game.
• The manga section could use a main-article template link to List of Kingdom Hearts media#Printed media

Other

• You could use a {{-}} to stop the portal box from pushing down into the references.
• The references aren't consistent in their dates- either do 'yyyy-mm-dd' or 'month day, year' for all of them
• Ref 51- can you find a better RS for the Famitsu review?
• Ref 53- GameInformer is actually Game Informer, and should be in italics.
• Ref 56- link IGN (also in 14, 15, 17, etc.)
• Ref 67- the author was Mark Matthews, not markatisu
• Be consistent with Gamasutra- stick with a linked Gamasutra, not sometimes unlinked and sometimes gamasutra.com
• It can be a pain to do, but consider archiving the refs via archive.org/web/ or webcitation.org, especially for the SE store links, since those can be transitory.
• Your see-also link is redirecting to just List of Disney video games, which isn't by genre.

Right! That's all that, so I'll place it on hold, and let you get to it. --PresN 22:30, 28 October 2013 (UTC)

I've done alot more with it. no i'm sure its "jump festa" not "festa". but other than that, i've done most of the formatting. unfortunately i found the missing info that you asked for, but their all found in fansites for some reason. there is much more to do, but i'm not sure i'll be able to finish until the on-hold is over. so i guess its a fail for nowLucia Black (talk) 07:59, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

I've gone through and tried my best to fix the remainder of what you mentioned, the articles been sitting here for three months, now its here I'm not gonna let it get passed over. --Lightlowemon (talk) 16:57, 2 November 2013 (UTC)

Alright, I've gone through and made some tweaks, but overall I think it's good now, and I'm going to pass the article. Thanks you two! --PresN 19:28, 4 November 2013 (UTC)