Talk:Lew Krausse Jr.

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Latest comment: 2 years ago by GhostRiver in topic GA Review

GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:Lew Krausse Jr./GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:45, 8 January 2022 (UTC)Reply


Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

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Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Infobox and lede

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Early life

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  • One of my good friends lives in Media, it's a cute place
  • Link "scout" here
  • Pipe "bonus contract" to signing bonus

Career

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Kansas City / Oakland Athletics

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Milwaukee Brewers

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  • "for" → "in exchange for" just to better separate the names
  • "to not report" → "not to report" (I hear my mother telling me not to split my infinitives)

Boston Red Sox

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  • Good

St. Louis Cardinals

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  • I don't love that this section is just titled "Cardinals" when it also mentions that he was with the Athletics' Triple-A team, but I don't know how I'd rephrase, as it seems disingenuous to add "Athletics" when he only played for their affiliate
    • One of those imperfect section headings, I agree. I think the justification for keeping it is (A) adding in that he also played for the A's AAA team would be too long and (B) his appearance with the MLB Cardinals is more notable than his minor league performance that season. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 18:28, 15 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Atlanta Braves

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  • pitching a scoreless 10th and 11th innings singular/plural agreement with "a" vs. plural "innings"

Career statistics, pitching style

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  • "win/loss record' → "win-loss record"
  • "1284" → "1,284" and "1205" → "1,205"; while MOS:DIGITS allows for four-digit numerals to include or exclude the comma, as a person with a numerical learning disability, the comma helps me not jumble up the numbers
  • "changeup in 1966" → "changeup that same year"

Personal life

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  • "the Churchill Downs"

References

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  • [18] "Find out who holds the record ..." is missing a work

General comments

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  • Images are properly licensed and relevant
  • No stability concerns in the revision history
  • Copyvio detector is currently refusing to load, so I'll check this later

Whew, been a minute! Life decided to throw everything and a half at me the past couple months. In any case, I think this is one of your better efforts (at least of what I've read) and all my comments are quite minor; putting on hold now. As always, ping me with questions and let me know when you're finished! — GhostRiver 17:34, 15 January 2022 (UTC)Reply

Thanks for making those changes. Earwig score seems inflated because there are really only a couple of direct quotes used, so I'm happy to pass this! — GhostRiver 16:46, 16 January 2022 (UTC)Reply