Talk:Mehdi Khalil/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 19:52, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

Taking this review for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 19:52, 2 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• "indeed, he was the fifth tallest goalkeeper at the 2019 AFC Asian Cup." - don't think this should be in the lead
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:27, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "first at Koping FF and then at Djurgården." - first playing at Köping FF before transferring to Djurgårdens.
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:27, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Early life

• "Khalil started playing five-a-side football," - Djurgården Fotboll says it was six-a-side football not five-a-side
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:30, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "at age 12 Khalil started playing five-a-side football, popular in Sierra Leone," - Khalil began playing six-a-side football, a popular form of football in Sierra Leone, at age 12 at Young Sportsmen Club as a defender.
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:30, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "He switched to football at age 15, moving to Johansen." - At age 15, he moved to Johansen to switch to Johansen to play football.
  • I've changed it in At age 15, he moved to Johansen to play football. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:30, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

2009–2012: Sierra Leone and Sweden

• "Khalil was nominated best goalkeeper" - named
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:31, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "he made his debut for the club's under-21 side in the U21 Allsvenskan [sv] against Brage, helping his side win 5–1." - repetition of "side"
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:31, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

2013–2017: Safa

• "However, Safa still won the encounter 3–2 thanks to a 92nd-minute" - through a 92nd-minute
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "In 2015–16," - In the 2015-16 season,
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "Khalil played 16 league games[7] helping Safa win" - a comma is mssing between "games" and "helping"
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "Following his contract's expiry in summer 2016," - Following the expiration of his contract in mid-2016
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "He remained with Safa one further year," - with Safa for one
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:33, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

2017–2020: Ahed

• "Khalil moved to Lebanese champions" - championship club
  • I meant to highlight the fact that Ahed were the title holders on the league. I've changed it to Khalil moved to Lebanese Premier League holders. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:34, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

2020–present: Zob Ahan

• "On 7 January 2019," - 2020
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:34, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

International career

• "He was part of the squad that played in the 2018 FIFA World Cup qualification between 2015 and 2016" - qualification stage
  • Changed to qualifiers
• "initially Abbas Hassan's reserve for the first three games, Khalil became Lebanon's first-choice goalkeeper in the final five games" - repetition of "games"
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:38, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "gained access to" - qualified them for
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:38, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "However, the three points were not enough to qualify Lebanon to the" - for the
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:38, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Style of play

• "and a big physical presence." - large
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:40, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• "Indeed, at 1.96 m tall," - the Template:Convert template is needed for the text in bold
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:40, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• The word "indeed" in the above sentence is not needed
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:40, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Honours

• The club portion of the honours section needs to be fully referenced
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 16:42, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

References

• All of the references that state the author should be included
  •  Done Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 17:46, 3 October 2020 (UTC)
• All of the sources that are written in a language other than English should be clearly indicated
  •  Done. I've also added script titles for Arabic titles, and translated titles for non-English titles. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 17:46, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 10:55, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

@MWright96: I should have taken care of everything. Nehme₁₄₉₉ (talk) 17:46, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

@Nehme1499: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:10, 3 October 2020 (UTC)