Talk:Human interactions with microbes/GA1
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Latest comment: 7 years ago by Chiswick Chap in topic GA Review
GA Review
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Reviewer: Cwmhiraeth (talk · contribs) 19:17, 26 September 2016 (UTC)
- I propose to take on this review and will read the article in detail soon. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 19:17, 26 September 2016 (UTC)
- Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 19:23, 26 September 2016 (UTC)
General points
edit- I was looking at the other "in culture" articles you have been working on. Insects in culture has a "Context" section and I like that, something to introduce the background to the article. In this article, you do of course mention some of the article's scope in the lead, but then the lead is merely meant to be a summary of the body of the text.
- Added Context section. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:19, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- I like it. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)
- Added Context section. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:19, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- I was also wondering whether the article is correctly titled or whether something along the lines of "Microbes and their relationship with man" would be better. The "In literature, music and art" section was more what I was expecting to find from the article title.
- We could rename it to Microbes and man either now or just after this process, as you prefer. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:59, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- I will leave that to you to do as you think fit. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)
- We could rename it to Microbes and man either now or just after this process, as you prefer. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:59, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
Specific points
edit- I'm leaving the lead for the time being but couldn't help noticing the amusing spelling mistake in the third sentence.
- "is used to modify plant materials" - some of the things you list in this sentence are not plants.
- In food production, the use of yeast to create carbon dioxide to cause bread to rise, does not seem to be mentioned (increased palatability?).
- "Microorganisms are used for many commercial and industrial production of chemicals, enzymes and other bioactive molecules, often through protein engineering." - This sentence needs attention.
- Reworded, hope that's better. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:00, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- "The practice of hygiene exists to prevent" - This is a strange way of expressing it, as if "hygiene" was around and waiting to be discovered.
- The "Warfare" section is a bit sparse.
- Extended. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:33, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- Very good. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)
- Extended. Chiswick Chap (talk) 15:33, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- Looking back now at the lead, I think it needs some expansion.
- Extended to reflect article contents. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:19, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- That's all for now. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:15, 27 September 2016 (UTC)
- You mention domestic animals and crops in the lead but not in the main text. Plant viruses, bacterial and fungal diseases impact production and sometimes livelihoods, such as Phytophthora infestans which is currently decimating my tomato crop. Cwmhiraeth (talk) 11:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)
- Added a summary of plant pathology and tweaked section headings accordingly. Chiswick Chap (talk) 12:35, 28 September 2016 (UTC)
GA criteria
edit- The article is well written and complies with MOS guidelines on prose and grammar, structure and layout.
- The article uses many reliable third-party sources, and makes frequent citations to them. I do not believe it contains original research.
- The article covers the main aspects of the subject and remains focussed.
- The article is neutral.
- The article is stable.
- The images are relevant and have suitable captions, and are either in the public domain or properly licensed.
- Final assessment - I believe this article reaches the GA criteria.
Nice work! Cwmhiraeth (talk) 14:13, 28 September 2016 (UTC)
- Many thanks for the review. Chiswick Chap (talk) 14:17, 28 September 2016 (UTC)