Talk:Mountains of Io

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Lots of good info, but a couple of improvements I'd suggest:

1. Look up how to use a reference more than once. That way your reference list at the bottom won't have multiple of the same reference listed.
2. You explained the different features well, but it'd be helpful to have corresponding images of what these features look like if possible.
3. A minor suggestion, but if you use the '#' Wikipedia will automatically make an indented, numbered list of descriptions rather than having to type 1), 2), etc. It keeps the formatting more organized.

Jamgreene (talk) 20:04, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

Suggestions from Graeme Bartlett

You seem to rely very heavily on a single author Schenk. It is good to use a variety, then we be sure of balance and not just one person's ideas. Some of the articles look like reviews, and that is a good type of source to use. Try to set the context in each section, so that if users skip ahead they will get a complete meaning, so for example make sure you mention Io in the first sentence in each section. when talking heights eg "which is 17.5 km" add the word high so readers are sure that is not the length. You can do links on Wikipedia with formatting like [[Io]] giving Io. It will take a while to learn how to format the wikitext, but a few pieces of knowledge will get you far. Since you have already got headings and references in hand. Graeme Bartlett (talk) 21:30, 5 March 2014 (UTC)

Suggestions from Orlando Guerra

Hey An. Looks like a very informative article. There's a few things I'd probably work on: [1.] Try to link words in your article to their corresponding wiki page. There weren't any links within your page, and a layman probably would need to read up on certain topics, [2.] I would try to put some pictures in of the certain features you talk about. I don't think you need a picture to everything just some of the main features, and this would help break up the continuous paragraphs of words, and [3.] I would work on your intro a little more. I had to read ahead to make sure that the topic was actually mountains of Io. But all in all a good start. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Oguerr1 (talk • contribs) 12:39, 6 March 2014 (UTC)

Suggestions from Kohl Koppens

An, this article is laid out very well but could use a few improvements.

1. I would place relevant images throughout the article to give the reader some insight. If you go to the upload file (under tools tab to the left), you can search 'wiki commons' for photos already approved on wiki.
2. Another suggestion is to make an info box on the side pertaining to Io. I would look at other pages in order to get a better understanding on how to set it up.
3. Lastly, if you'd like to have a distance converted from mi to km just type 17.5 kilometres (10.9 mi).(check it out in edit mode!)

kkoppe2

Suggestions pt 2

This page has made much progress from the last critique, just a few things to consider.

1. I think the images added work well but could probably be placed throughout instead of down one side.
2. The info box added on the side could still give you a nice outline but the contents break it down well.
3. I think the introductory paragraph could use a little work as well.

Live Suggestions

You've got tons of good information, but a couple of organizational improvements I'd suggest are:

1. You outline some equations in the Stresses header. It would be easier for the reader to look at these if they were distinguished more from the paragraph.
2. A couple sections have just one large paragraph. If you could break them into smaller ones, it's a lot easier to read.
3. For your first section, since you've split it into two subsections, Wikipedia has a built in function to put those underneath the main "Observation" header. Use === on either side of the subsection title to use this function.

Jamgreene (talk) 20:05, 7 April 2014 (UTC)

Suggestions Pt. 2

You have a very informative intro and talk in depth about the following sections. The added links look good. There were some grammatical errors especially in the section of mountain types. Also, maybe consider adding subsection titles or maybe spatially break up certain subsections. Pictures are great. I wouldn't add too many more pictures but maybe consider having at least one of each mountain type. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Oguerr1 (talk • contribs) 12:51, 8 April 2014 (UTC)

Suggestions from Volcanopele

Great to see another general Io article cropping up! I've gone ahead and linked to this article from the main Io article. If you need ideas for additional sources, take a look at the sources used in the list of mountains on Io page. Feel free to send me a message on my talk page if you need access to any of them (particularly the very nice overview book chapter by Turtle et al. We might also want to look at some recent work by Bland and McKinnon as well as by Kirchoff et al. (2011) regarding the formation of Io's mountains.

As far as suggestions for the page itself. We might want to reduce the numbered lists in the article and try to convert those more into prose (see the second paragraph in List of mountains on Io to see how it was managed there to discuss the variety of mountain types). Also some of the image captions should probably be trimmed, maybe by bringing some of the explanatory text to the article (or creating an article for Hi'iaka Montes to put some of that info into since two of the very long captions are related to images of those two mountains). --Volcanopele (talk) 22:08, 28 April 2014 (UTC)