Talk:Ken Anderson (wrestler)/GA1

GA Review

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GA review (see here for criteria)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars etc.:

   It's relatively stable - I wouldn't expect this topic to be completely stable.

6. It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

   Suggestion (not mandatory): Upload this image to Commons and add to Commons category. Excellent job with great pictures and descriptive captions. One of the strengths in this article.

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

   Reviewed by Royalbroil

Comments

• Wow, I didn't know that he was from Two Rivers, Wisconsin! I took most of the pictures in that article.

• Can I assume that whenever a sentence doesn't have a source listed, that it comes from the next source?

• I spot checked some statements and found them in the following reference.

• "His father died at home on April 13, 2006, after a two-year battle with cancer." - Too much information (Criteria 3b - unfocused)

• "He was invited to appear on WWF Jakked, WWE Velocity, and WWE Sunday Night Heat in a try-out basis as an independent jobber several times from 2001 to 2004." - could be worded more cleanly as "He was invited to appear in a trial basis on WWF Jakked, WWE Velocity, and WWE Sunday Night Heat as an independent jobber several times from 2001 to 2004."

• "...Anderson signed a developmental contract with WWE" is worded weakly. It would be stronger if it said "...WWE signed Anderson to a developmental contract."

• Neither of these sentences need the word "also". "Anderson also made some appearances on TNA Xplosion and was initially approached for a contract at Total Nonstop Action Wrestling by Jeff Jarrett but communications broke down.[5] Anderson also competed in the 2002 and 2003 Ted Petty Invitational tournaments (the first one then known as the Sweet Science Sixteen tournament) but did not advance past the first round in either of them."

• Please cite the following controversial statement even if its the next cite"...he showed himself to be a cocky and arrogant wrestler with not only his mannerisms..."
  • Still not addressed. Something this controversial must be cited at the end of the sentence. Royalbroil 01:49, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
    • Done. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 15:02, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• wikilink mini-feud to Feud (professional wrestling)

• "still working in OVW" - delink to OVW - the abbreviation has already been explained before this

• I don't understand this sentence - too many thoughts in one sentence: "On the July 21 episode of SmackDown!, Batista put out an open challenge to replace his opponent Mark Henry, who had been injured, at The Great American Bash on July 23 for the number one contender spot"

• He won that match - did this give him the championship?

• If you're talking about the Great American Bash (2006) match, no he didn't win a championship, because there was no championship up for grabs. Neither Batista not Kennedy was a champion at the time. ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 16:37, 11 March 2009 (UTC)

• Ok, it didn't made sense to me. I looked around and discovered that Batista vs. Kennedy was on the undercard, which I think should be mentioned in this sentence. Royalbroil 01:03, 12 March 2009 (UTC)

• Delete "also" from "Kennedy also helped The McMahons" - it adds nothing

• This sentence is too long and it doesn't make sense: "Kennedy also helped The McMahons (Vince and Shane) in their feud with D-Generation X (DX) (Triple H and Shawn Michaels), appearing at both SummerSlam and the August 28 episode of Raw, along with Finlay and William Regal from the SmackDown! roster, to attack DX"

• Done, I think. ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 16:37, 11 March 2009 (UTC)

• ...more to follow

• Was the injury "right triceps muscle tore off the bone" real or kayfabe - it should be identified. Comment with no action needed - I like how the Bob Holly article did a better job of identifying what was real and what was kayfabe. I like how that article uses "heel" and "turning face" to describe wrestlers.
  • The injury was indeed real, it wasn't scripted. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 19:19, 12 March 2009 (UTC)

• Awkward sentence: "On the August 20 episode of Raw, Carlito hosted his interview segment, Carlito's Cabana, when Carlito challenged his special guest, Umaga for his Intercontinental Championship at SummerSlam." Suggested form: "On the August 20 episode of Raw, Carlito hosted the interview segment Carlito's Cabana. During the segment Carlito challenged his special guest, Umaga for his Intercontinental Championship at SummerSlam, and Kennedy also demanded a shot at the title."
  • Done.

• "impersonating a McMahon" should be in quotes
  • Done.

• "due to Kennedy" - due sounds bad and should be replaced by "because"
  • Done.

• Same sentence: "the steroid scandal" - what steroid scandal? Is there a wikilink to explain? Do you mean "a steroid scandal"?
  • There was a scandal in mid-2007 that involved some WWE wrestlers, including Kennedy, who tested positive for steroids and there was a big fuzz about it; Sports Illustrated wrote the story and stuff. Yeah, I added "a" for the steroid sentence.

• "then Intercontinental" needs a dash, as in "then-Intercontinental"
  • Done.

• "for that evening pending on the fan's votes." - do you mean depending instead of pending - "for that evening, depending on the fan's votes." Or do you mean "for that evening, pending the fan's vote"
  • It should read "for that evening, pending the fan's vote[s]".

• "Neither man won the opportunity as" has a break in thought and it needs a comma between "opportunity" and "as"
  • Done.

• "a scheduled match made by William Regal" - did William Regal do the scheduling of the match? Or was in a participant in the match?
  • Yes, tradition is that the other two candidates who do not receive the opportunity to be part of a main title match, that they are scheduled to face off against each other, or usually compete together.
    • The sentence is still awkward and it doesn't say what you have replied. Royalbroil 01:49, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
      • Well, the reason is not fully explained, is because it shouldn't get out of detail. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 15:02, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "Kennedy entered a program with Shawn Michaels" - what type of program? Do you mean an episode? A steroid abusers program?
  • Feud; the word feud is repetitive in the article, trying to use another wording.
    • I think the problem is that the sentence should say "Kennedy entered a the program with Shawn Michaels" Royalbroil 01:49, 13 March 2009 (UTC)
      • The problem is that "the program" doesn't make sense. Anyhow, I've re-worded the sentence. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 15:02, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• "Michaels defeated Kennedy, after he was able" - Why is there a comma?
  • That's my bad.

• "thus ending the rivalry" - "thus" is unneeded and awkward
  • Removed.

• "he tore his lat muscle" - please expand the full word for lat
  • Done.

That's it. I might read it a second time. Royalbroil 02:23, 12 March 2009 (UTC)

I've gotten your concerns, if there's anything else, please let us know. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 19:19, 12 March 2009 (UTC)

I have bolded 3 replies that still need to be addressed. Royalbroil 01:49, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

... And I have responded to those queries. --  ThinkBlue  (Hit BLUE) 15:02, 13 March 2009 (UTC)

• GA Passes! I reviewed the replies and read the article a second time. I believe it meets the GA criteria. Areas that could use improvement: some of the wording could be improved, some are noted in my comments. I would expect the article to have more inline citations if you plan to attempt Featured Article. Royalbroil 04:38, 14 March 2009 (UTC)

Thanks! Much appreciated! ♥Nici♥Vampire♥Heart♥ 12:51, 14 March 2009 (UTC)