Talk:Nelson's Green Brier Distillery

Undid Previous Revert

Adding a note regarding undoing Oknazevad's revert: I disagree with the assertion that the text was promotional before the revert. However, I went back through it again and made a few more tweaks to remove any remaining words or phrases that could potentially be interpreted as "advertising." I also removed a couple of phrases that mentioned how a spirit could be used, just in case that could be seen as suggesting that readers try it. It doesn't include any flowery language or pompous adjectives. The main differences at this point are the inclusion of products, brief descriptions, and a few sentences about awards. Product information and awards (within reason) are present on almost all distillery pages and should not cause a problem as long as they don't read as glowing promotional reviews, and they don't. I believe the tone is neutral and informational, not promotional. It's just facts without flowery words.Riterchick1983 (talk) 10:16, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

Also, it's my understanding that a full revert of someone's work should only be a last-resort, worst-case-scenario option (besides reverting vandalism, of course). We are encouraged to improve on each other's work, not just undo it, especially when it's a lot of work and not just a sentence or two. Even from an opposing viewpoint of feeling like it was too close to advertising, it was noted that the underlying facts were good. I would think that would mean corrections were in order, not a full revert.Riterchick1983 (talk) 10:16, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

It was much very improved on your second pass, without many changes. I just ask that you keep that sort of critical eye for tone in future edits, as it better fits the purpose of an encyclopedia. oknazevad (talk) 11:01, 11 June 2018 (UTC)

Absolutely. It's a lot different than the type of writing I'm used to (fiction), and I'm still working out the kinks. Thanks!Riterchick1983 (talk) 11:54, 11 June 2018 (UTC)