Talk:Nelson Ludington/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 5 October 2020 (UTC)

Am reviewing this for the GAN October 2020 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 5 October 2020 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a (major aspects): b (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/Fail:

Lead

• Wikilink Upper Peninsula of Michigan

•  Done

Ancestry

• "William (b. 1608) and his wife Ellen (b. 1617)" - born 1608 and born 1617 respectively

•  Done

• Wikilink New York to New York (state)

•  Done

Life

• "Ludington was born January 18, 1818," - born on January 18

•  Done

• "His parents were Frederick Ludington and Susannah Griffeth." - Any information on their occupations?

•  Done

• "Ludington was the fourth of their sixteen children.[6] The youth received private schooling by tutors for his early education." - consider merging these two sentences together

•  Done

• "at a general store at Cold Spring, New York," - in

•  Done

• "and received further training in retail business." - where did Ludington receive this training?

•  Done

• Wikilink Great Lakes to the relevant article on its first mention

•  Done

• Wikilink sawmill on the first mention

•  Done

• Think the fourth and fifth paragraphs can be joined together

•  Done

• "Royce spelled it as Escanawba. That was entered with the state in 1863 as the legal name for the town." - think these two sentences could be combined

•  Done

• "simplifying the spelling. [18]" - the extra space between the period and the citation is not needed

•  Done

• "the main docks and lumber yards of the firm were at Milwaukee." - in

•  Done

• "the main docks and lumber yards of the firm were at Milwaukee. It was the main distribution point to places throughout the United States via shipping on the Great Lakes."

- Think merging these portions of text will help matters here

•  Done

Marriage and family

• "Ludington died January 15, 1883," - died on January 15

•  Done

• Perhaps mention he died from a short-term illness

•  Done

Legacy

• The two bulletpoints should not exist and the information contained within them be in ordinary prose

•  Done

References

• All mentions of newspapers.com should begin with a capital letter

•  Done

• Reference 12 is missing the author

•  Done

• Referecnce 25's page number should be in its own field not in the work field

•  Done

• Reference 29 is missing the access date and publisher

•  Done

Will put the review on hold to allow the nominator to address or query the points raised above. MWright96 (talk) 19:55, 5 October 2020 (UTC)

•  Working --Doug Coldwell (talk) 21:34, 5 October 2020 (UTC)
• @MWright96: All issues have been addressed. Can you take another look. Thanks. --Doug Coldwell (talk) 19:09, 10 October 2020 (UTC)
  • @Doug Coldwell: Now promoting to GA class. MWright96 (talk) 19:22, 10 October 2020 (UTC)