Talk:Night of Desirable Objects/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Queenieacoustic (talk) 10:15, 23 June 2011 (UTC)

Comments

Plot

1. Walter should be wiki-linked the first time the character is mentioned.

Production

Nothing here

Reception

Reviews

1. "A.V. Club" should be "The A.V. Club".
2. "writing that despite its 'the relative insignificance'" Remove "the".
3. "MTV's Josh Wigler thought the episode mystery" Should be "episode's mystery".
4. "and he wished that more time had been focused on this." "He" is redundant.

Lead

1. Image caption needs punctuation.

In conclusion

This article is very close to GA. I'll put it on hold for seven days so that you can make the minor fixes needed. Good luck! Queenieacoustic (talk) 10:15, 23 June 2011 (UTC)

I made most of your suggested changes. The screenshot caption does not need a period per MOS, as it is an image caption and incomplete sentence (can't find the exact policy now but I will if you need to see it). Thanks very much for the review! One of these days I'm going to make a dent in your own GAN pile. Ruby2010 comment! 13:59, 23 June 2011 (UTC)

Well done! Passed. Queenieacoustic (talk) 16:49, 23 June 2011 (UTC)