Talk:Solo (concert residency)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: ZooBlazer (talk · contribs) 22:28, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

I've done DYK, FLC, and FAC reviews involving your articles, so I figured I might as well complete the foursome (is that the right word?) by doing a GA review. I should have my comments posted later today or tomorrow. -- ZooBlazer 22:28, 15 March 2024 (UTC)

Pseud 14 Just some small things to clean up and then I'll do spotchecks. -- ZooBlazer 00:30, 16 March 2024 (UTC)

Thank you for taking up this review. And for doing this milestone of completing the foursome ;) Pseud 14 (talk) 01:49, 16 March 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Lead

• Comprising six shows --> Should it be comprising of six shows?

This edit actually suggests that comprise of is poor phrasing in Wikipedia. So I changed it to consisting of. (A patrol editor had fixed that before)

• receiving praise for its theme and Velasquez's vocal abilities and connection with the audience --> Comma after "abilities"

Done

Background and development

• On August 3, 2022, Velasquez --> Velasquez should be linked as it's the first mention of her outside the lead.

Linked. Wrote her full name on first instance

• she would be performing a concert residency --> also link concert residency for the same reason as above

Linked

• I'll leave it up to you, but social media accounts could be linked as well, but I could see an argument for WP:OVERLINK.

That makes sense, I've linked

• announced that Solo will be staged --> should it be would be staged now that everything is past tense? I notice you use was in the next sentence for promotion.

You're right, as this was in the past. Changed.

• Are ticket prices necessary to include?

I've removed its mention

Concert synopsis

• Is the synopsis written in present or past tense? Is starts out past tense, then it becomes present tense. Then switches back to past tense.

My bad. Missed to changed those instances. Should be in the past tense now.

• Madonna's "Crazy for You" which --> add a comma before "which"

Done

• She proceeded with and She then started --> Maybe adjust the wording of one of these sentences to not both start with "she" back to back.

Revised

Critical response

• In a review of the opening night, Leah Salterio writing for ABS-CBNnews.com highly praised --> I think there should be a comma after .com
• Also should ABS-CBNnews.com be in italics?
• Delink the site as well, as it is a WP:DUPLINK

All done

Images

• For the infobox image, can you link a source where iMusic Entertainment posted it?

I have added the link to its Facebook page where the poster was taken

Spotchecks

Using this version of the article:

• [1] - Looks good
• [5] - Looks good
• [8] - Looks good
• [10] - Looks good
• [11] - Looks good

Spotchecks all support the information the refs are used for in the article. Earwig picked up no major issues.

Discussion

@ZooBlazer: Thank you as always for reviewing my nomination. All comments actioned and look forward to the rest. Pseud 14 (talk) 01:49, 16 March 2024 (UTC)

Happy with the changes. Spotchecks look good and no issues detected by earwig. Happy to pass! -- ZooBlazer 02:04, 16 March 2024 (UTC)

The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.