Talk:Source–message–channel–receiver model of communication/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: AirshipJungleman29 (talk · contribs) 11:08, 29 June 2023 (UTC)

I'll take this review. Please consider reviewing an article from the list at WP:GAN. This review will be used for Wikicup points. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 11:08, 29 June 2023 (UTC)

Hello AirshipJungleman29 and thanks for taking on this task. The article had to wait for quite a while to get a review. Phlsph7 (talk) 08:28, 30 June 2023 (UTC)

@AirshipJungleman29: just a short query to ask how the review is progressing. Phlsph7 (talk) 07:27, 6 July 2023 (UTC)

Apologies Phlsph7, I forgot I hadn't done this. I still have to do spotchecks, but I was going to ask that you try to make sure that all information is presented as simply and concisely as possible, for the general reader. I found some parts written too indistinct or not as straightforward as possible. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 08:18, 6 July 2023 (UTC)

I'll get started with this. Could you pinpoint me to some of the problematic parts you have in mind? Phlsph7 (talk) 08:29, 6 July 2023 (UTC)

Take the sentence "In regard to source and receiver, Berlo discusses four features that determine the success of communication: communication skills, attitudes, knowledge, and social-cultural system." I was unable to understand its true meaning without looking at the image. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 09:18, 6 July 2023 (UTC)

Thanks for pointing this out. I've made a few adjustment to simplify this and other passages in order to make them more accessible. Were there other overly difficult sentences that caught your eye? Phlsph7 (talk) 11:00, 6 July 2023 (UTC)

Spotcheck passed below. Other parts of the lead especially that could be simplified:

• The sentence "Berlo analyzes their features and discusses how they affect the efficiency of communication." can be cut entirely
• The sentence "He understands communication in a wide sense that includes verbal and non-verbal communication." can be moved later and merged with the one starting "Berlo sees all these forms of communication"
• The discussion of the attributes could, for maximum readability, look something like this: "each component has several key attributes. source and receiver share the same attributes ... which correspond to ... The attributes of the message are code, which ... , content, which is ... , and treatment, which consists of ... Each can be analyzed in two ways... Finally, the channel, which is..., can be viewed as the sense..."

• At the moment, the discussion of the model is a bit confused, so a more organised layout, esp. in the lead, would be better.

Other than that, I think the detail in the lead is good enough to satisfy the GA criteria. If you're intending on nominating at FAC, it'll probably need a copyedit and some cleanup. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 14:30, 12 July 2023 (UTC)

I tried to follow your advice. In the process, I divided one lead paragraph into three parts to treat the components separately. Phlsph7 (talk) 17:25, 12 July 2023 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

1. Is it well written?

   A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:

   B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:

2. Is it verifiable with no original research?

   A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:

   B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:

   C. It contains no original research:

   D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:

3. Is it broad in its coverage?

   A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:

   B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):

4. Is it neutral?

   It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:

5. Is it stable?

   It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:

6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?

   A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:

   B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:

7. Overall:

   Pass or Fail:

Random spotchecks

Sorry I've taken so long. Will review 10 randomly chosen citations from this version:

• 2 neither this nor source 3 verify the title of the book
• 12 good
• 15 good
• 16 good
• 23 good
• 39 good
• 48 good
• 49 AGF
• 54 good i combination with Taylor
• 64 good

Source spotcheck passed. ~~ AirshipJungleman29 (talk) 14:30, 12 July 2023 (UTC)

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