Talk:Swine (Lady Gaga song)/GA1
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GA Review
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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 06:25, 23 December 2016 (UTC)
Lead
edit- was inspired by Gaga's → was inspired by the singer's (word repetition)
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 17:57, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- when she was 19, by an unnamed → when she was 19 by an unidentified (no comma)
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 17:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- Set comma after "Throughout the song"
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 17:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- comparing them → isn't the typo wrong here?
- What do you mean? ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:22, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- Link bulimia to Bulimia nervosa
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 17:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- on Gaga, onstage. → no comma here
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 17:59, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- (along with Gaga's "Til It Happens to You") → Remove the brackets and put this after "The Haunting Ground" with a comma + add year of release for "Til It Happens to You" in brackets
Infobox
edit- flawless ;)
Background and writing
edit- Development of Lady Gaga's → no full names
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- her second one → you can state "her second record" here
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- which Gaga explained → state "the singer's" here to avoid word repetition
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- Gaga recalled → same as above
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- emotional therapy ... I wasn't even → ... to [...]
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- happened ... I saw → ... to [...]
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:03, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
Recording and composition
edit- Bradley Stern described the music → state "saw the music" here to avoid word repetition
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- key of G minor with → set comma before "with"
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- Lyrically, the song → use "recording" here to avoid word repetition
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- comparing them → same as in the lead
- chorus is reached with Gaga belting → chorus is reached, with her belting
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- shouting: "You're just → replace : with ,
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- pig inside..." → pig inside [...]"
- I removed the "..." altogether. Doesn't seem necessary. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:15, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
Critical reception
edit- wrote of the song: "It's a → replace : with ,
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:25, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- describing Gaga's belting of the lyrics, and the sounds from the keyboards, as reminiscent of → describing Gaga's belting of the lyrics and the sounds from the keyboards being reminiscent of
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:25, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- long... → long [...]
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:25, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
Live performances
edit- one-minute "teaser" → no need of the "" here
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- Gaga's show at the iTunes Festival → State "The singer's" here to avoid word repetition
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- at the South by Southwest (SXSW) music festival in Austin, Texas → place this after "Swine" for better flow
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- then invited performance → which was followed by her inviting performance
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- reported: → reported,
- I think we should definitely keep the colon since the quote starts with a new paragraph. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- complained that the performance → state "the show" here to avoid word repetition
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- told MTV News: "I can → replace : with ,
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- Gaga told Today → Gaga confessed to Today (word rep.)
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:12, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
Credits and personnel
edit- Unlink Artpop
- Done. Now says, "Credits adapted from the album's liner notes." ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:05, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
Charts
edit- flawless ;)
Other stuff
editCopy-violation
edit- 50.0% is WAY too much! Please look for the first two sources at the top of the list and reduce the content from them in the article's body
Images and others
edit- Images perfectly illustrate the article
Links
editReferences
edit- Please avoid WP:SHOUTING in refs 2, 5, 10, 12, 13, 14, 17, 19, 20, 21 and 31!
- Done. ---Another Believer (Talk) 18:07, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- As far as I checked them, the references do cover the assertations made in this article.
- 2 dead links!! Please fix this!
Outcome
edit- On hold for 7 days. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 15:47, 24 December 2016 (UTC)
- @Cartoon network freak: all ready to go. —IB [ Poke ] 13:56, 25 December 2016 (UTC)
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