Talk:Taboo (Koda Kumi song)/GA1

GA Review

Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 00:31, 29 March 2016 (UTC)

Hello, I am Carbrera, and I'll be reviewing this article for possible good article submission.

Full review coming very soon. Carbrera (talk) 00:31, 29 March 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

• Capitalize the 'a' in "alt" to match the rest of the infobox's template
• Remove the certification area in the infobox

Lead

Paragraph 1

• "stylized" → "capitalized"
• "song which the lyrics discussing" → "song that lyrically discusses"
• Eh; the last sentence in this paragraph isn't really necessary, but it's less detailed than previous mentions in articles so if you don't want to remove it you don't have to

Paragraph 2

• Add "with a" before "majority"
• "commended" → "commending"

Paragraph 3

• "emphasize" → "emphasis"
• Add quotation marks around "sexiest"

Background and composition

Paragraph 1

• "charged" → "charge"

Paragraph 2

• Shouldn't the 'o' in "online" be capitalized?

Reception

Critical response

• Again, separate these sections like I recommended in previous GA reviews for your articles please
• AllMusic should be italicized
• "fairly favourable" → "fairly positive"
• Capitalize the "b" in "b=side"

Commercial performance

• Add "number" before "one of the Japanese Oricon Daily Chart..."
• "sold near 90,000 units" → "sold nearly 90,000 units"

Music Video

Paragraph 1

• The 'v' in the section title should be lowercase
• Remove "Japanese director" or "long-time collaborator"; you don't need both
• "drinking a the table" → "drinking at the table"

Paragraph 2

• "has Koda walk into..." → "has Koda walking into..."
• "women dance to the song." → "women dancing to the song."
• What do you mean by "closed toilet"?

Impact and legacy

Paragraph 1

• "Several critics online and through publications..." → "Several critics and publications online..."
• The rest of this section is fantastic!

Live performances and promotion

Paragraph 1

• "as a special event..." → "at a special event..."
• "by Koda. "Taboo" was first..." → "by Koda; "Taboo" was first..."

Paragraph 2

• Could you vary your use of "Taboo" by using "the track", "the single", "the song", etc.?

Track listing

• Make the section title plural
• Avoid SHOUTING in the track titles; they should just state "Taboo"
• It should say "Digital music video" instead of "Digital Music Video"
• Match the 'Digital Music Video' section so it matches the rest of the track listings

Alternative Versions

• Remove this section entirely; it's not necessary; if you want to keep it, merge it with the promotion section or 'track listing' section

References

• Remember not to repeat links to publishers/websites more than once; please fix this

External links

• Remove the semicolon after the link

End of GA Review:

Your articles keep getting better and better; I shall put it on hold until changes have been made. Thank you. Carbrera (talk) 22:57, 1 April 2016 (UTC)

Hi @Carbrera: I have finished all the adjustments on the article. Hope this helps, CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 02:16, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

@CaliforniaDreamsFan: I'll look over it in a minute. I'm currently reviewing "No Man's Land". Carbrera (talk) 02:21, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

@Carbrera: Ahhhh, regarding that review, could you please check your Talk page. I sent you a message regarding the review. Cheers, CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 02:25, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

@CaliforniaDreamsFan: I'm afraid I don't see anything on the talk page for that article. Are you sure it's that article? Carbrera (talk) 02:27, 2 April 2016 (UTC)

@Carbrera: Sorry, I posted it on YOUR talk page. Its regarding the review of "No Man's Land" that needs required attention before its reviewed. Cheers, CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk · contribs} 02:31, 2 April 2016 (UTC)