Talk:The Space Museum/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Aoba47 (talk · contribs) 04:18, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

Lead and infobox

• In the first paragraph, the first three sentences repeat the word "serial", and while this article is about that, would there be a way to avoid this so the prose is not as repetitive? For instance, the serial was broadcast on BBC1 could be change to it was broadcast on BBC1.
• I would link incidental music for this part, used stock music recordings for the incidental score.
• Since VHS and DVD is linked in the article, I would link them in the lead to be consistent.
• Add ALT text for the infobox image.

Plot

• Everything looks good with this section.

Production

• Serial should be linked in the part, asked to develop a four-party serial of his story, as it is the first time the word is mentioned in the article and it should be linked to be consistent with the linking in the lead.
• This is more of a clarification question, but do we have any examples of the humor that was edited out of the original script?
• I would link incidental music in this section as well. It may be helpful for readers who are unfamiliar with the concept.
• Is there a reason why lobotomy is put in quotation marks?
• Link The Crusade in the "Filming" sub-section.

Reception

• The image should have ALT text.
• Has there been any scholarly analysis of this serial?

Commercial releases

• Please add ALT text for the infobox image.

Citations

• Avoid putting words in all caps as done in Citation 18.
• A majority of the web sources seem to have the website/work and the publisher, but Citation 20 only has DVD Talk and not the publisher Internet Brands.
• Locations are included in the last two citations in the "Bibliography" section, but not for the first citation.
• Would this citation from Den of Geek be beneficial to the article?
• This book (Doctor Who and Science: Essays on Ideas, Identities and Ideologies in the Series) seems to have some useful information and analysis.

I hope that this review is helpful. I will look through the citations more thoroughly once my comments have been addressed. Have a great weekend! Aoba47 (talk) 04:18, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

Thanks for the review, Aoba47! I've gone through and addressed your concerns. In response to a few:

• I've removed the links to VHS and DVD completely to match with their recent removal from The Web Planet (per the GA review over there).
• I'm sure it's possible to discover some examples of the removed humour (especially by looking at the novelisation) but unfortunately my sources didn't provide any.
• I've actually requested some scholarly Doctor Who books from McFarland already, so I've added your suggestion to the list. As soon as that request is fulfilled, I'll be sure to add any information I find that is relevant.
• I appreciate the Den of Geek link. Not sure how I missed that one; I used it in The Chase.

Thanks again. Let me know if there's anything else. – Rhain ☔ 11:51, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

• Thank you for addressing everything. Just as a clarification question, but do you know when you would get access to the McFarland sources? I was just curious about whether I should keep this GAN on hold until then or pass it sooner as I am sure you will come back and add this information when it is available to you. Aoba47 (talk) 22:09, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

• @Aoba47: Unfortunately, I think it could take a while, so it may not be worth keeping this on hold. I'll likely only be able to add a sentence or two anyway, so there won't be any major changes, but I'll certainly add as much relevant information as possible once I have access. – Rhain ☔ 22:59, 9 January 2022 (UTC)

• That makes sense to me. Thank you for the response. I will look through the article one more time tomorrow just to make sure that I have not missed anything, and after that, I will likely pass it as GA. Aoba47 (talk) 02:05, 10 January 2022 (UTC)

I will ✓ Pass this article as a GA. If possible, I would greatly appreciate any input on my current FAC, although I understand if you do not have the time or interest. Great work with the article! Aoba47 (talk) 04:21, 10 January 2022 (UTC)