Talk:Tsuki (song)/GA1

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Reviewer: Cartoon network freak (talk · contribs) 20:13, 27 September 2016 (UTC)

Soon... Best, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:13, 27 September 2016 (UTC)

Lead

• Namie Amuro, which appeared on her → Amuro for her
• set a comma after "concept compilation album"
• set a comma before and after "Dimension point"
• and distributed worldwide → and released worldwide (due to word rep.)
• both which → remove "both"
• through iTunes Store and Amazon.com. → you may remove this, as it's irrelevant for the lead
• that features instrumentation such as synthesizers, bells, and chimes. → with instrumentation consisting of...
• Majority of them → The majority of them
• was a success in Japan → experienced success in Japan (fancruft)
• the Oricon Singles Chart; it also peaked at number three on the Japan Hot 100 chart. → the Oricon Songles Chart and the Japan Hot 100.
• An accompanying music video → An accompanying music video for "Tsuki"
• which features → and features
• it appeared in → it was used for
• and her 2014 → remove "her" as you named the word once before
• concert tour → concert venue

Infobox

• CD only edition. → Artwork used to commercialize the physical edition of "Tsuki"
• DVD single → DVD

Background and composition

• English-language Japanese music media website → Japanese music website
• for January 29 → for January 29, 2014
• On the singles release date, Amuro confirmed → When premiering the recording, the singer confirmed
• the singles B-sides → the single's B-sides
• the former track → the former song (word rep.)
• with Amuro and between → with
• Both tracks have also been released on the iTunes Store prior to "Tsuki", the first on October 16, 2013, whilst the latter on October 23. → The tracks have also been released through iTunes on October 16 and October 23, 2016, respectively.
• instrumentation of synthesizers → instrumentation consisting of synthesizers
• According to a review at Japanese music magazine CD Journal, they described the instrumentation and composition as "minimal" and noted it as a mid-tempo track. → A reviewer of Japanese music magazine CD Journal described the production of the recording "minimal", whilst noting it as a mid-tempo track.
• at the Avex Sound Studios → remove "the"
• B-sides are → were described
• samples the composition of the track "Fire Power" by American DJ and music producer Wolfgang Gartner; he is also credited as the tracks co-songwriter. → samples elements of "Fire Power" (YEAR OF RELEASE) by American disc jockey Wolfgang Gartner, for which he received credit as a co-songwriter.
• [9][7][10] → [7][9][10]

Release

• set comma before and after "Dimension Point"
• word rep. through "distributed" in the beginning
• The CD single features the title track, both "Neonlight Lipstick" and "Ballerina", plus all three instrumentals to each respective track.[5] The DVD single features the same track list as the CD, but also includes the one music video to each song. → While the CD single features the title track, "Neon Lipstick", "Ballerina" and their respective instrumentals, the DVD single additionally incorporates their visuals.
• The digital EP → A digital EP
• The digital EP was released on iTunes Store, and features all six tracks from both the CD and DVD single. → A digitally released extended play features all the six songs from the physical formats.
• The CD and DVD single formats were distributed in Taiwan by Avex Taiwan, featuring the same track list. → leave out
• The cover artwork was shot by Japanese photographer Kazutaka Nakamura, which was an outtake of Amuro during the sessions of the photoshoot for Japanese magazine Sweet; it features Amuro inside a room full of shiny fabric and her in a long white wedding dress. → The accompanying cover artwork—portraying Amuro inside a room full of shiny fabric and her wearing a long wedding dress—was shot by Japanese photographer Kazutaka Nakamura; it acts as an outtake of the singer's photoshoot for Japanese magazine Sweet.

Reception

• was positive in their review → was positive in his review
• the tracks lyrical content → the track's lyrical content
• In another review for her compilation album Ballada, another staff member praised the tracks "majestic" sound and the production of it. → When reviewing the singer's compilation album, another member of the website praised the song's "majestic" sound. (you got the production twice)
• was a success in Japan → experienced success in Japan (due to fancruft)
• week. It slipped → week, but slipping
• word rep. here through "units"; change to "copies".
• In its third week, it slipped outside the top 20 to number 21, and sold 4,794 units; it lasted five weeks inside the top 50 chart, and lasted 14 weeks inside the top 200 chart. → In its third week, "Tsuki" dropped to number 21 and sold 4,794 units, lasting a total of five weeks inside the top 50 and 14 weeks within the top 200.
• By the end of this sentence, you repeat yourself several times with "Tsuki"; try to alternate with song, single, recording...
• Digitally, "Tsuki" was a success in Japan. It debuted at number three → Additionally, the single opened at number three
• one of Amuro's highest debuting singles on that chart; it stayed in there for over 10 weeks → marking one of Amuro's highest-debuting releases and staying in the chart for over ten weeks.
• You use "both" one time too much
• set a comma before "respectively"

Music videos

• received music videos → were all accompanied by music videos
• the first two directed → the first two were directed
• whilst "Ballerina" was directed by YKBX → whilst the visual for "Ballerina" was filmed by YKBX
• I prefer editing the synopsis by myself before passing the article
• according to the director Mitsuishi → Mitsuishi further added that
• Only a teaser version of the video was published on Amuro's YouTube channel on January 14, 2014. → The music video was previewed by a teaser which premiered on YouTube on January 14, 2014.
• "Neonlight Lipstick" is → The visual for "Neonlight Lipstick"
• based off → based on
• Only a teaser version of the video was published on Amuro's YouTube channel on November 25, 2013. → Prior to the clip's release, a preview was premiered on November 25, 2013
• "Ballerina" was → "Ballerina"'s clip acted as a
• Only a teaser version of the video was published on Amuro's YouTube channel on November 25, 2013. → Like the previous music video, "Ballerina" was accompanied by a teaser which was released on the same day on social media.

Promotion

• it appeared → it was used
• song to the → song for the
• album with the same name; the tracks appeared on the live DVD. → album with the same name, and appeared on the live DVD
• then appeared → were subsequently included
• and was included on the live DVD and CD. → and on the physical releases
• For "Tsuki", it's most recent appearance was on her 2015–16 Livegenic concert tour in Japan, which was in support of Amuro's studio album Genic (2015) → "Tsuki" was most recently performed on her 2015–16 Livegenic concert venue in Japan, which supported Genic (2015).

Credits and personnel

• Credits adapted from the liner notes of "Tsuki"; → Credits adapted from the liner notes of the single's physical release.
• Song credits → Technical and songwriting credits
• nail and make-up → nails and make-up

Charts

• Add notes instead of writing the songs' titles after a semicolon (;)

Certifications and sales

• Add a {{N/A|None}} for Japan's first entry

Release history

• Add scope="row" for countries.
• Unlink labels and formats as usual

Outcome

• I've put this  On hold for 7 days. Good luck with editing and don't forget to ping me when you're ready with this. Best regards, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:41, 29 September 2016 (UTC)

@Cartoon network freak: All done! Thank you for the review!

Passing article! Congrats, Cartoon network freak (talk) 20:09, 4 October 2016 (UTC)

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