Talk:Typhoon Eli/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Eddie891 (talk · contribs) 23:41, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

I can take this one on. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 23:41, 8 May 2020 (UTC)

comments

• "known in the Philippines as Typhoon Konsing" suggest mentioning in article body so you can move this out of the lede
  • It's probably best suited for the lead tbh. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• "23 people were hurt" -> " 23 people were injured"? hurt can be a rather vague term
  • Sure. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• link Shrimp farming?
  • Sure. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• could link Coconut tree and Pepper tree?
  • Sure. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• Suggest adding a year to the first paragraph in the body to give the reader something to anchor on
  • I mean the year is in the title but sure. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• "Following the recurvature of Typhoon Deanna on July 2" What was Typhoon Deanna? Perhaps one more sentence of introductory set-up would be apt?
  • Added a link. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• link Monsoon trough?
  •  Done. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• is there a link for 'ridging'?
  • Added. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• "with both the JTWC and JMA also analyzing a peak intensity" suggest removing 'both' because you then go on to talk about how they differ
  • Good call. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• " improved drought conditions" -> "alleviated drought conditions"?
  • Good call. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• " initial reports of 25 fishermen were" -> "initial reports of 25 fishermen"
  • Re-worded anyway because I use the word "reports" and "reported" twice in a sentence. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• source #9 is available for free here
  • Replaced. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)
• Ref #2 could use page numbers as it's a 200+ page document
  • Added. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)

That's all from me. The article otherwise meets GA criteria. Feel free to discuss any of these. Nice work! Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 12:17, 9 May 2020 (UTC)

Thanks for the review. YE ^{Pacific Hurricane} 16:18, 9 May 2020 (UTC)

Yellow Evan, This article is well written, referenced, illustrated, comprehensive and otherwise meets the GA criteria. I'm happy to pass. Eddie891 ^Talk _Work 21:22, 10 May 2020 (UTC)