Talk:Typhoon Jebi/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Hurricane Noah (talk · contribs) 01:21, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Will do tomorrow. Noah^Talk 01:21, 3 October 2020 (UTC)

Lead

• was an extremely damaging tropical cyclone that became the strongest typhoon to strike Japan since Yancy in 1993 as well as Japan's costliest typhoon I would cut this since the latter half of the sentence explains its damage in more detail.
• Jebi formed from a tropical depression south-southwest of Wake Island on August 26 I assume you meant disturbance.
• before becoming the twenty-first named storm of the 2018 Pacific typhoon season on August 27. Delete before.
• then rapidly intensified as it passed the Northern Mariana Islands on August 30 I would change then to "and later".
• Subsequently, Jebi reached peak intensity as a powerful typhoon on August 31 Add "its" before peak. Also, I would rather you say Category 5-equivalent instead of a powerful typhoon as it gives more detail on the intensity and is less subjective than "powerful".
• Jebi caused large waves along the coast of Taiwan that caused at least six fatalities I would change that to "resulting in" to vary it up from the previous portion.
• and power outages affected storage of livestock and produce Add "the" before storage.
• repairs to the bridge only completed seven months later I would replace only with were

Met

• Link Coordinated Universal Time on the first mention of UTC.
• as Jebi developed maximum sustained winds of 95 km/h (60 mph) I would change Jebi to "its" since the name has already been mentioned. Also, I would say "maximum sustained winds increased to..." rather than developed
• The JTWC analysed that Jebi intensified into a super typhoon Could you add a note explaining what the minimum threshold for this status is?
• The cycle completed by 21:00 UTC on August 31 while Jebi began to curve northward through a weakness in the subtropical ridge,[17] however drier air then began to impinge on the southern portion on the circulation, resulting in continued weakening. Could you split this after ridge? Also, however should have a comma after it.
• causing convection to warm Add its before convection.
• As a result, the JTWC assessed that Jebi weakened below super typhoon status at 18:00 UTC on September 1. I would say "had weakened" and "by 18:00 UTC".
• despite Jebi maintaining a ragged yet well-defined eye.[22] This should be split off into its sentence. It is also missing a word.
• Later on September 3, an extratropical cyclone approaching Jebi from the northwest began to accelerate Jebi north-northeast I would remove the first mention of Jebi.
• with the JTWC declaring Jebi no longer a tropical cyclone "Declaring that" and "Jebi was"
• before also declaring Change also to later.

Effects

• At Kankūjima (the island of Kansai International Airport) I would say "the island where ... is located".
  • I just changed it to mention KIX only - since the airport covers the entire island there's really no difference. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 14:29, 5 October 2020 (UTC)
• significantly higher than Add "which was" before this part.
• Restoration works completed fully only on September 20 This is a bit jumbled.
• nearby Itami Airport and Kobe Airport --> "the nearby Itami and Kobe Airports" You can maintain links on just the first part of the names.
• off Kushimoto, Wakayama Comma after the second part of the location.

That should be it for this article. Noah^Talk 23:12, 4 October 2020 (UTC)

@Hurricane Noah: should be done. Hope I didn't miss anything - am somewhat tired now since school's resumed and I have to readjust my sleep cycle. ~ KN2731 {talk · contribs} 14:29, 5 October 2020 (UTC)