Talk:USS Admiralty Islands/GA1

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Peacemaker67 in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Peacemaker67 (talk · contribs) 04:54, 3 April 2020 (UTC)Reply


A few comments, most of which are repeats of my comments on other articles of this class. Suggest implementing the changes on all ships of the class:

  • suggest "USS Admiralty Islands was one of fifty Casablanca-class escort carriers built for the United States Navy during World War II."
  • suggest "throughout the Admiralty Islands in the Bismarck Archipelago"
  • drop the "Built for service during World War II,"
  • link ceremonial ship launching, ship commissioning and ship breaking in the lead
  • Invasion of Iwo Jima→invasion of Iwo Jima
  • link escort carrier at first mention in the body
  • the extreme width in the infobox should be covered in the body
  • the power output is in hp in the body, shp in the infobox
  • "was provided by 8eight"
  • the conversion of the Bofors guns doesn't match between the body and infobox (rounding)
  • 20-mm→20 mm, same with 40-mm
  • link United States Navy at first mention in the body
  • "Manus Island in the Admiralty Islands"
  • Pearl Harobr
  • ShipbuildingHistory.com, navsource.org, ww2db.com, and Hazegray.org are marginally acceptable at GA, but I wouldn't be relying on them at Milhist ACR or FAC. You should be looking less to online sources and more to standard texts on these types of ships.
  • the crew numbers should be covered in the body
  • you need to thin out the photographs, they are causing sandwiching of text, suggest only one relating to the accident, certainly drop the one of Jones and the fire one, which is very indistinct, the crew inspection one also doesn't show much. You could get away with only one of the aerial shots towards the end. I'll look at the licensing once you've thinned them out a bit.
  • I suggest stacking/floating the first two images in the body to the right using, for example {{stack|[[File:Inboard and outboard profiles of a Casablanca-class escort carrier, 1946.png|thumb|left|A profile of the design of {{USS|Takanis Bay|CVE-89|2}}, which was shared with all ''Casablanca''-class escort carriers.]]|float=right}}
  • CVE-99 isn't cited in the body

That's all I could find, placing on hold for the above to be addressed. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 05:38, 3 April 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Peacemaker67: I've responded to your points, all of the images have NARA tags. Stikkyy t/c 06:14, 5 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
Actually, scratch that. Seems like some of these don't actually have NARA tags. Navsource cites a good amount of the images as being courtesy of the grand nephew of the pilot, and although I'm 90% sure that all of these are probably the work of the navy photographer on-board (who else would be lugging around a camera?), I'm not a 100% sure. Stikkyy t/c 06:18, 5 April 2020 (UTC)Reply
This article is well-written, verifiable using reliable sources, covers the subject well, is neutral and stable, contains no plagiarism, and is illustrated by acceptably licensed images with appropriate captions. Passing. Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 06:23, 5 April 2020 (UTC)Reply