Talk:USS Nehenta Bay

Latest comment: 4 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 00:57, 10 January 2020 (UTC)Reply

I will review this one, comments to follow in due course. Zawed (talk) 00:57, 10 January 2020 (UTC)Reply

  • Design and description: for the first paragraph put refs into numerical order. There is no need for the cite in the first sentence since it is also one of the ones at the end of the paragraph. In the second paragraph, a couple of numbers (8 and 12) should be written out for consistency with the other small numbers.
  • Construction: just need to mention Gravina Island as location for Nehenta Bay since it is referred to in the lead.
  • Service history: "dysfunctional aircraft." This seems an unusual turn of phrase. Perhaps non-functional?
  • Service history: "protecting them from Japanese submarines or aircraft" Shouldn't this be submarines and aircraft?
  • Service history: "rolling at about 30° to 37°, a dangerous height for an aircraft carrier." should this be "a dangerous angle?
  • Overall, the service history is quite long - perhaps a couple of section headings to break it up. One of them could be in relation to the Typhoon since this forms a big chunk of this section of the article.
  • Image tags OK, no dupe links, and the Earwig tool doesn't pick up anything major.

Looks a nice solid article, just a few minor nitpicks. Cheers, Zawed (talk) 10:10, 10 January 2020 (UTC)Reply

@Zawed: I've responded to your points. Stikkyy t/c 07:13, 11 January 2020 (UTC)Reply
Changes look good, I actioned a couple that were missed. Passing as GA now as I consider that this article meets the necessary criteria. Zawed (talk) 05:57, 12 January 2020 (UTC)Reply