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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 23:14, 12 May 2022 (UTC)

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Al-Wishah fi Fawa'id al-Nikah

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  • ... that Al-Wishah fi Fawa'id al-Nikah, the 15th-century Islamic sex manual by Egyptian writer Al-Suyuti, developed from a literary tradition that first emerged in 10th-century Baghdad? Source: Myrne, Pernilla (2018). "Women and Men in al-Suyūṭī's Guides to Sex and Marriage". Mamlūk Studies Review. XXI. The Middle East Documentation Center (MEDOC) at the University of Chicago: 47–67. doi:10.25846/26hn-gp87. ISSN 1947-2404.

Created by Iskandar323 (talk). Self-nominated at 19:06, 4 May 2022 (UTC).

  • On it. — LlywelynII 15:56, 7 May 2022 (UTC)

    @Iskandar323: what are you trying to say with "Arabic-Islamic"? Hyphenating it that way would mean 'the special kind of Islam practiced by speakers of Arabic' but that can't be what you really mean, can it?

    If you're just trying to say that it's written in Arabic and it's part of Islamic culture, you could say Arabic Islamic but you're still probably better off dropping the "Arabic" altogether or finding some way to use "...in Arabic..." — LlywelynII 20:53, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
I just followed the terminology of Myrne here, but I assume the intent is to contrast the genre with more general Arabic erotological works or perhaps other Islamic erotological forms that might include, say, Persian-Islamic and Turkic-Islamic literature. I personally saw the sense in it, but I understand if you think it needs reworking for the DYK. Iskandar323 (talk) 20:46, 8 May 2022 (UTC)
Yeah, I later saw that but the point stands: a it's not decent English and b it's lazy and hazy academese. It's offputtingly unclear to normal readers and unhelpfully ambiguous even to people who know what they're talking about. She should've avoided it, even though she's a trustworthy source for your use if it were a helpful term of art. — LlywelynII 21:49, 8 May 2022 (UTC)
@LlywelynII: FYI, I tweaked the article and DYK to eliminate the "Arabic-Islamic" phrase. Iskandar323 (talk) 19:41, 10 May 2022 (UTC)
  • @Iskandar323: New enough at time of submission; long enough (4352 elig. chars.); no need for QPQ (only 1 other DYK at this username); adequately sourced (currently overwhelmingly based on a single source but it seems to be a reliably scholarly one by a professor at U. Gothenburg specialized on the subject); per Earwig, (1) only the sentence fragment "...which rely partly on the same sources..." needs to be rephrased, since everything else is new or appropriately formatted as a quote; both hooks are sourced although (2) there's some WP:LEADCITE violations. The points being made in the lead should be repeated at the right place in the body of the page and the source should go there. Currently, the body of the page doesn't discuss the 10th-century Baghdadi heritage and only talks about Indian influences in relation to a different medieval book. Given the odd title, the article would benefit from a #Name section, although that would be a nice extra and isn't essential. All the scholarship online seems to know the work by the name given, except for something really out of left field in Burton. (3) Instead of a #Publication section, a medieval work like this should have a #Manuscripts, #Editions, &c. section. Ms Myrne's book discusses several MSS and the page should list the ones that she mentions, make clear if those are the only surviving versions or (more likely) just some of them, and then mention the published version (and its unknown source) at the end of the paragraph. — LlywelynII 21:17, 7 May 2022 (UTC)

    (4) Minor WP:POViness w/r/t some judgments. His treatment of women being "complex and ambiguous" is quoted but the judgment needs to be specifically tied to Ms Myrne or omitted, since it's not an objective statement and not Wikipedia's own view. (5) Minor grammar issues like a "with" clause following a colon (it should be a comma), but I can clean those up for the page once the actual issues are fixed. — LlywelynII 21:26, 7 May 2022 (UTC)
@LlywelynII: Ok, I think I may have covered all of the above - let me know if there's anything I've missed. Iskandar323 (talk) 20:06, 8 May 2022 (UTC)
I wasn't sure whether it was worth developing an ALT2 option deploying that "apex of the genre" quote or if that might be considered be over-egging it. Iskandar323 (talk) 21:52, 10 May 2022 (UTC)
@Iskandar323: Sex sells and I think it's great to expose people to this view of sex, which is almost entirely alien to Anglosphere culture. On the other hand, I can help fix your grammar or paragraph structure but I can't write and approve an ALT hook for you. You'd need to write it yourself and then I could review it. I've already seen Myrne's quote on it and helped clean up any WP:POViness in the article so reviewing it should go quickly when you know what you'd like to say. Just ping me. — LlywelynII 22:10, 10 May 2022 (UTC)
  • @Iskandar323: ALT0 is neutral, terse, and sourced. You can use it, but I personally find it kinda boring. ALT1 is neutral, terse, and sourced. It seems fine. I do think ALT2 may get more views for your page but, if you want to use it, (i) you need to use the verb form "has been" since it's only true of your source's opinion and is not an objective fact apparent to all people and (ii) you need to rephrase things. I suggest you replace "Arabic" with "Islamic" in all three hooks since the language of the sex manual isn't very important but the cultural context is. For ALT2, you need to reverse the two adjectives because, while Myrne's 2nd quote just says "sex and marriage manuals", she's obviously referring back to her earlier establishment of a category of "Arabic-Islamic sex manuals" at the beginning of her article. I think it's safe to assume that 100% of the major sex manuals being written in medieval Arabic are in some way Islamic; Myrne describes them as members of her category even when they bring in Indian elements, don't directly draw from hadith, &c. On the other hand, it isn't safe at all to assume that major sex manuals weren't being written in Turkish, Persian, or the Indian languages around the same time and Myrne is excluding those from her consideration. Personally, I always leave out any other links from my DYK hooks since they only draw readers away from your article, but that's a personal choice. — LlywelynII 17:57, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
@LlywelynII: Ok, points taken, though I must demur on the last point. There are several Arabic sex manuals that wouldn't be considered Islamic, not least the Encyclopedia of Pleasure, and it wasn't my reading of Myrne that she characterised it as such. It was to draw this distinction that I created an Islamic sexual education literature category separate from the Arabic erotic literature category. The same parallels hold true in Arabic poetry, where there is Islamic stuff, Sufi stuff that often treads a fine line between good behaviour and naughtiness, and then a bunch of stuff that is definitely not Islamic. However, for the sake of writing a 150-character hook, I don't mind fudging the details just a little bit ... anyone who wants to know more can just click through to the article eh? Iskandar323 (talk) 19:47, 11 May 2022 (UTC)
I really think she does although fair enough if you don't. In that case, I think ALT2 would need to be too awkwardly worded to get the point across accurately. — LlywelynII 00:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
  • ALT1 is good to go. Thanks for making this article and all your work, Iskandar. — LlywelynII 00:17, 12 May 2022 (UTC)
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