User:Lazman321/Spotchecks/Claire Redfield

Since the FAC for Claire Redfield has lasted for an entire month without a text-source integrity and close paraphrasing spot-check, I will take up conducting one. I will be checking about half of the sources in this article, about 37, using a random number generator. Unless I have reason otherwise, I will assume good faith on any source I cannot access. Lazman321 (talk) 06:36, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

I am half-way finished with the spot-checks. For reference, I am checking the sources as of this revision. Lazman321 (talk) 07:49, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

Okay, finished. I will post my thoughts on the FAC. Lazman321 (talk) 08:58, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [68] - The quote is "modern video game action heroes", not "contemporary video game action hero". I feel this review is unnecessary for this article as the reviewer is essentially just talking about the controls of both Claire and Leon i.e. the player character, not Claire herself. If it is to be kept, I do recommend specifying that the reviewer is only referring to the controls, not Claire's personality as is implied by "feels like a human being".

Removed 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:53, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [19] - This, along with [18], seem like original research, as neither source explicitly says that later games not produced by Mikami depict Claire in such a way.

Removed 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:53, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [41] - Pass.
2. [8] - First use: Pass. Second use: Pass.
3. [61] - Pass
4. [26] - Does not mention Claire's hair.

Removed 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:57, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [5] - AGF for the most part, though I question the statement that "James Baker" is a pseudonym and would recommend a secondary source to support that. Yes, James is a masculine name, but that doesn't mean it is for sure a pseudonym.

Source replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:53, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [16] - First use: Pass. Second use: Although the source does not mention that Elza is blonde, I'll let it slide as any reasonable person would conclude that she is blonde just by looking at her model in the source. Although I will mention that there is some close-paraphrasing here.

reworded. 16:00, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [2] - First use: Pass. Second use: Pass.
2. [13] - First use: Pass. Second use: Pass. Third use: Pass.
3. [10] - First use: Pass. Second use: Original film series? What original film series? There's only one live action film series and Claire is played by Ali Larter in it. The source is centered around a commercial for Resident Evil 2, which Adrienne Frantz did play Claire in.

Reworded 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:53, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [4] - First use: Pass, though please swap it with [3] for text-source integrity. Second use: Pass, ditto.

I don't understand this one. Wdym swap, like I will remove the 4th source? If I did then the RE degeneration will be unosurced. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:08, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [50] - Pass
2. [55] - AGF
3. [1] - First use: Pass. Second use: Where in the credits does it say Claire's nationality? Third use: Pass. Fourth use: Pass.

Removed 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:08, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [71] - AGF
2. [23] - Judging by the sources, I don't think "hardened" is the right word to use, as Okabe says, "Even though Claire has been through a lot, this is a situation she hasn’t been in before. She’s not really prepared for it. I think you’ll see a little more vulnerability, you’ll see less of a kind of blasé attitude." Perhaps replace the word with "practical", as both sources would support this characterization.

Done 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:08, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [17] - First use: Pass. Second use: Pass.
2. [43] - Pass.
3. [37] - The source literally says, "before the villainous Red Queen attempts to destroy the final remnants of humanity", and neither of the sources say Claire teams up with the Red Queen. Maybe they're misrepresenting the movie, which I've never seen, but it is worth accounting for.

Replaced 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:08, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [12] - First use: Pass. Second use: Pass. Third use: While true, the source doesn't support the statement as Resident Evil: Extinction was the only film in the series Claire was in at the time.

Removed the source since its irrelevant. 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:08, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [44] - Pass
2. [47] - Pass
3. [64] - Pass
4. [42] - Pass
5. [49] - Pass
6. [33] - Pass
7. [22] - Pass
8. [70] - Pass
9. [18] - See [19] above
10. [72] - First of all, Sarkeesian's problems are not simply "revealing outfit = bad"; she is criticizing a trend in the Resident Evil series of "rewarding" the male players with unlockable outfits that reduce the oft-capable women into sexual objects. Second, although she mentions the motorsport outfit, Sarkeesian actually emphasizes the rodeo outfit for Claire in Revelations 2, not the motorsport outfit. Finally, the motorsport outfit is not even in Revelations 2; it's from Code: Veronica.

Reworded 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 15:53, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [6] - First use: Pass. Second use: Pass. Third use: Pass.
2. [60] - Pass
3. [34] - First use: Close paraphrasing. Second use: Pass. Third use: Pass.

Reworded 🍕BP!🍕 (🔔) 16:16, 27 November 2024 (UTC)

1. [15] - AGF
2. [56] - AGF
3. [30] - First use: Pass. Second use: Pass.