User:Melinab21/Medical volunteerism/AB.cal Peer Review
Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
edit- Whose work are you reviewing?
Avrillarios (shared article with Melinab21)
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- Medical volunteerism
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- User:Melinab21/Medical volunteerism
- User:Avrillarios/Medical Volunteerism
Evaluate the drafted changes
editMelina:
The original lead section of this article was definitely lacking context, the additions to this section are neutral and informative! (Not sure if citations would be needed here or not.) I think the addition of a "History" section adds much-needed context to the article! I would suggest revising the tone of the sentence that describes colonial/Christian beliefs to be more neutral, and avoid using quotes if possible (as recommended by the trainings). Sources should probably be added to the first sentence, and the statements in the second half of the added paragraph. I would also suggest breaking the additions into two paragraphs for easier readability.
Avril:
Overall your addition to the ethics section is well-written and cites adequate sources! However I am finding it to be a bit too essay-like for Wikipedia, especially at the end where you make this claim: "By implementing responses to criticism, the effectiveness of medical volunteering can be shifted to best suit the community at hand." I would recommend revising the diction and sentence structure of your additions to make it sound less like you're trying to make an argument. There are similar unsupported claims made throughout the addition; I would recommend either adding sources to these or removing them.