User:Shreya.C123/Traditional ecological knowledge/AB.cal Peer Review
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edit- Whose work are you reviewing?
Shreya.C123
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Shreya.C123/Traditional ecological knowledge
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Traditional ecological knowledge
Evaluate the drafted changes
editI think the additions to the "Background" section that reframe TEK as a global topic are very necessary! However similar to your other article, I think there is a strong argumentative nature to the additions; in the Background section there are no cited sources and several statements that make unsupported claims (I've copied this section below):
... Inherently, TEK exists in the liminal space between science and spirituality, intricately merging the two of these realms that seem at odds in the current Western world.
TEK has the power to both complement and correct present-day climate solutions, providing a critical ancestral perspective that can help restore balance. However, simultaneously, the implementation of TEK must be enacted with consideration and immediate involvement of Indigenous communities, as otherwise, the burden to find a solution will fall upon them. Additionally, Traditional Ecological Knowledge, like many other forms of Indigenous knowledge and sciences, can often be sacred, so it is critical to engage closely with the community to not disrespect their ancestral wisdom.
I think your addition of the practice of "jhum" was well-written, well-cited, and informative! The only change I would suggest is making this sentence more neutral and/or adding a citation:
A revival of traditional farming methods is needed to rectify the impacts of centuries of colonial-era land devastation and the more recent neoliberal land corporatization