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Bio
editMy name is Thinh Phu Nguyen ( 1998- Present). I am from Viet Nam. I had been in the US for almost 4 years. This is a sixth quarter for me at Everett Community College. Before I been here, I study Grace Academy in Marysville and then I got high school Diploma. My life in here kind up boring for me, but I just study and get a good grade. My goal is to get associate DTA to transfer WSU, so I can study architecture major and then got a bachelor degree. I love to play soccer and lifting a weight. I love to travel around the world. I traveled to South Korea, Thailand, the US such as Las Vegas, Idaho, Oregon, Kansas, Ohio, New York, Texas, California, Montana, illonis, Michigan, Virgina, North Carolia, .....
I like to learn about how to get rich, human nature. I plan using Wikipedia to research projects, and another assignment to do my own work. However, I am not really like the book in the past. I like to write about something in the future like how to create something from technology.
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Article Critique
editI have been interested in playing soccer ever since I was seven years old. In Vietnam, soccer is very popular and played by boys and girls. Most children start playing soccer when they start elementary school. Many countries of the world have national teams such as Germany, Italy, England.... are the most popular. I visited the Association Football page on Wikipedia, and found three aspects worth commenting on : the rules of the game, players equipment and international competition.
Lack of Citations( the laws of the sport)
editThe laws of the sport contain seventeen rules. However, certain modifications are allowed for groups such as Freshman, Sophomores. The team will have 21 players for each team, which includes goal-keeper, defensive,offensive. The laws of the sport are governed by FIFA, although many countries may have differences in the laws and rules. When I searched the laws and rules of the game on Wikipedia, I noticed, based on my experience playing the game for many years, that it did not mention differences between small and large high school teams. For example, coed teams in America. Universally, soccer is a sport for both male and female characters.
Outdated citations( player equipment)
editThey have a lot of citations on the pages , but some of the new ideas they don't have. General references are listed at bottom on the page, but some references aren't cited in the article, so it's hard to know which one is the fact in sections. The article could add more about technology in the references. If there are other sources beyond these, we will perhaps add the links section that could include to article. For example, many times a player score a goal, but the referee doesn't recognize the goal. That makes players feel bad and upset. The wikipedia didn't mention it on the page.
Organization( international competition)
editReports by investigative journalists have linked FIFA leadership with corruption, bribery, and vote-rigging related to the election of FIFA President Sepp Blatter and the organization's decision to award the 2018 and 2022 World Cups to Russia and Qatar, respectively. This is important to know the events in Football. Majority, Germany champion World cup on 2014, but the link did not mention.
Conclusion
editSoccer is a world famous sport mankind has ever created. With regulations and laws changed through time, soccer proves to be one of the most respected and well-known sport which is played in many countries and fashioned by many sport professionals. Soccer will forever one of the oldest and purest sports in the world.
( I added an additional photo to the Hooligan section of the wiki article Association football User talk:Txnguyen35)