Peer review
Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
For New Articles OnlyIf the draft you're reviewing is for a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.
Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
edit- Whose work are you reviewing?
Vanguard826
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Vanguard826/sandbox#Draft Contributions to Vote.org Article
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Vote.org
Evaluate the drafted changes
edit(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)
The article you are adding to does not have a lot of information which gives you a lot of leeway into structuring. Right now you have five very nicely written paragraphs that all run together. I think you should break the down a little. You have a nice paragraph to replace the current work subtopic sentence. The other four can be split from before and after the termination of their former CEO. On a side note, it's interesting they terminated the CEO instead of her resigning. She was forced out. There might be more relevant context about the differences in opinion and the new direction they wanted to take. The context you give is already detailed and sufficient. I'm having trouble coming up with recommendations to this well rounded draft. Your sources are supportive and from relevant organizations like the NYT and Vox. All your links lead directly to them and you paraphrase in a way that avoids plagiarism but still makes the point you are aiming to take. Your lead is interesting and creative because it outlines an internal battle within the company. An image of the companies logo may be good to add. Your tone is very neutral and you bring new and up to date information to the current article. Overall, very nice job!