User:Vedisobe/Cultural identity/Grackle.cackle Peer Review
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Complete your peer review exercise below, providing as much constructive criticism as possible. The more detailed suggestions you provide, the more useful it will be to your classmate. Make sure you consider each of the following aspects: LeadGuiding questions:
ContentGuiding questions:
Tone and BalanceGuiding questions:
Sources and ReferencesGuiding questions:
OrganizationGuiding questions:
Images and MediaGuiding questions: If your peer added images or media
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Overall impressionsGuiding questions:
Examples of good feedbackA good article evaluation can take a number of forms. The most essential things are to clearly identify the biggest shortcomings, and provide specific guidance on how the article can be improved.
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General info
edit- Whose work are you reviewing?
Vedisobe
- Link to draft you're reviewing
- User:Vedisobe/Cultural identity
- Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
- Cultural identity
Evaluate the drafted changes
editLead
editI liked your lead paragraph, it checked out to me in terms of content. I wasn't sure how you're intending the work in your sandbox to relate to the lead content that's currently in your article, but I imagine you have a plan.
Content
editIt looks like you have a bunch of important missing content you're adding to the body of the article. It looks like you have a good array of historical work in that regard that's currently missing, I'm curious about whether you plan to include more contemporary work on this topic? Maybe there's already some of that in the body of your article. The array of scholars you picked to talk about definitely seem to be relevant to the equity gap convo-- i'm wondering if there's others (maybe less well known scholars, scholars from the global south, etc) that might want to be brought in to your content (genuine question, i don't know the answer!). The future paragraph could use more fleshing out in particular, curious about the alternative perspectives you reference but don't go into.
Tone and Balance
editI don't really have any feedback for your about tone and balance, it all looks good to me!
Sources and References
editI think my big feedback here is to add more sources in general, both sources from the scholars you referenced and also contemporary sources. I know that a big part of what you're doing is filling in the gaps for the history component of this topic, so it makes sense that you are using a lot of older sources for that. It would probably be good to reference, like, one or two major works for each of the scholars you listed that contribute to the topic of cultural identity.
Organization
editobviously, this is still a rough draft, but it seems like you have a good organization system coming together.
Overall impressions
editSeems to me like you're on a good track for improving the material in your chosen article, especially re// filling in the gaps about the historical context and development of the topic. I'd mostly encourage you to continue adding references and to fill in more content where there are gaps in what you're adding (again, understanding that this is a draft)