User talk:Caledonia athome/Agnes Wold
Latest comment: 4 years ago by Ian (Wiki Ed) in topic Feedback
Feedback
edit@Caledonia athome: Nice work on your draft. Some things you could do going forward.
- The "Advocacy for women in academia" could use references beyond the existence of the paper.
- Also I think it would be better to be less telegraphic in this section. Rather than saying "Wold's heavily cited article published in Nature" you could say something more like
In 1997 Wold and Christina Wennerås published a paper in Nature (or a paper entitled...) which found...
. It would be really helpful if you could find something among the 1705 papers which cited it (according to Google Scholar) which comments on its impact and importance.
- Also I think it would be better to be less telegraphic in this section. Rather than saying "Wold's heavily cited article published in Nature" you could say something more like
- The "Awards" section would be improved said things in longer paragraphs. The single-sentence paragraph feel a bit too much like bullet points. Keep in mind that the people reading this might well be members of the general public. Ian (Wiki Ed) (talk) 16:57, 17 June 2020 (UTC)