Talk:Human trafficking in Europe

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Hi. I am writing this article for a class. It is an extension of the regular Human trafficking article. Please provide suggestions and feedback as you see fit. Thanks. Jesswest (talk) 05:47, 11 April 2011 (UTC)

Feedback

this is looking good, you will want to do some citation past the Trafficking typologies parts, there is a lot of info up there that is not cited. Also as a general rule all ends of paragraphs must be cited (or ends of lists). Also, this is a big topic, There should be a bit more than 9 sources. Not to say that your sources are not correct or anything, just there should be some more out there for future editing. Anyway, just some food for thought, great work so far, I added you to the Human rights project, and bumped you up to a C class rating. With some time and some edits, you'll be way on your way to get a B-GA class article. Don't forget to add you page to the DYK, it should be no problem to get it passed. Keep up the good work!Kayz911 (talk) 06:38, 28 April 2011 (UTC)

Online Ambassador feedback

1. The lede sentence needs to be rewritten to comply with the Manual of Style. Essentially, Human trafficking in Eastern Europe is...
2. The lede section needs to be rewritten to effectively summarize the article's content. Try to add a couple more paragraphs, no more than four total.
3. The hatnotes are not properly formatted or placed.
4. Section titles need rewritten in sentence caps and expanded to indicate the content in the section. For example, "Causes (of what)", "Prevalence (of what)", "Recruitment (of what)" or "Recruitment (noun)", "Challenges (of what)", "The Role of NGOs" to "Role of nongovernmental organizations" (we don't begin sentences with "The".
5. I would outright remove the "Country Snapshot" section. The article needs to have a global view. The TVPA is specific to the U.S. government view of trafficking and is not widely acknowledge by other governments. The content is presented without defining or providing a background on the TVPA. Readers in other countries may view this article and wonder why information and analysis pertaining to the U.S. is applied to an article on Eastern Europe. If you can find UN data, that would be preferable.
6. The "For Country Specific Information" needs to be revised to a "See also" section with only one column.
7. References section, remove columns. Only add a second column when the article has over 20 references.
8. Change the "Further reading" section to an "External links" section.
9. General editing. The phrase "Eastern Europe" is not always initial capped, but at times is simply "eastern Europe". "Eastern Europeans" should be "eastern Europeans". Communism is not capped. Numbers one through nine spell out, while 10 and over use digits. Use the word "percent" in prose and % only in tables. Replace hyphens with en dashes.
10. Watch the weasel words. Basically, these are generalizations and unsupported attributions. "some people say, it is believed, many are of the opinion, most feel, experts declare, it is often reported, it is widely thought, research has shown, science says, it was proven". Phrases such as these present the appearance of support for statements but can deny the reader the opportunity to assess the source of the viewpoint. They are referred to as "weasel words" by Wikipedia contributors. They can pad out sentences without adding any useful information and may disguise a biased view. Claims about what people say, think, feel, or believe, and what has been shown, demonstrated, or proven should be clearly attributed.
11. As far as sourcing, a general rule of thumb is at least one source within each paragraph. Make sure to add a citation to any statement that is challenged or likely to be questioned or challenged. There are several unsourced statements in the lede and prose that need citations. Also cite any quotations or statistics.
12. We need to look for an applicable infobox. The image would go in the infobox.
13. We can't use terms that indicate a time period. The meaning of "current" or "now" changes over time. What may be happening this week, may not be happening next week. We have to create articles that will stand the test of time and not require continual updating.

This is about all for right now. Overall, when the above concerns are addressed, the primary issues that remain focus on copyediting. Let me know if you have any questions. Cind.amuse 08:24, 29 April 2011 (UTC)

Editing For Class

I am going to be adding some new information to this article for a class. I wil be focusing on sex trafficking. Other than what is posted above, are there any suggestions? Thanks Bryner2Bryner2 (talk) 21:00, 1 April 2012 (UTC)

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This article is the subject of an educational assignment at Indiana University supported by WikiProject United States Public Policy and the Wikipedia Ambassador Program during the 2011 Spring term. Further details are available on the course page.

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