Talk:M21 mortar carrier

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Latest comment: 19 days ago by FOARP in topic Requested move 28 October 2024

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Reviewer: Cerebellum (talk · contribs) 01:17, 15 August 2015 (UTC)Reply


Hello! I will be reviewing this article. --Cerebellum (talk) 01:17, 15 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

@Tomandjerry211: Article looks good! It's pretty short so I don't have many comments but here they are. I'll put this on hold for now until we can address the concerns below.

  • Other changes were the differences between the half-track that they were based on. I'm not sure you need this, it kind of goes without saying.  Done
  • When you start talking about the M4 in the first paragraph, find a way to introduce it so readers have some context - something like "The M21 was the replacement for the M4 MMC,   Done
  • In Development, you start by talking about the M4 and don't mention the M21 until the second paragraph. You need to introduce the M4 so readers have some context, something like The M21 was the replacement for the M4 MMC, whihc was used from xxxx to xxxx (if that's accurate).  Done
  • In the lead, you talk about how the 81 mm mortar had insufficient power, but you don't mention that in the body. --Cerebellum (talk) 23:00, 21 August 2015 (UTC)  DoneReply

@Tomandjerry211: Always a pleasure working with you! Pass. --Cerebellum (talk) 11:46, 22 August 2015 (UTC)Reply

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There is a move discussion in progress on Talk:M40 Gun Motor Carriage which affects this page. Please participate on that page and not in this talk page section. Thank you. —RMCD bot 22:49, 27 August 2024 (UTC)Reply

Requested move 28 October 2024

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The following is a closed discussion of a requested move. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made in a new section on the talk page. Editors desiring to contest the closing decision should consider a move review after discussing it on the closer's talk page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.

The result of the move request was: Moved - No oppose !votes, no reason not to carry out the move FOARP (talk) 09:09, 5 November 2024 (UTC)Reply


M21 Mortar Motor CarriageM21 mortar carrier – Much more common name. Dicklyon (talk) 01:39, 28 October 2024 (UTC)Reply

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